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  2. Tinker

    Cut short by one syllable

    Hi Juris, This is quite different than your usual offerings. I like its brevity. I am wondering, though probably correct, it might read with more clarity "Hell's Angel Bathtub Speed" like a name or title without the possessive 's. Just a thought that occurred when I read it for the 2nd time because I stumbled on it the first read. I understand your choosing another site and I am sure we will all look in but please don't abandon us entirely. We all have other sites we visit but only have so much time to divide ourselves too thin. ~~Judi
  3. Tinker

    Identity

    You had me spinning Barry, so many vibrant images. I agree with Tony, that last line rings in my ears. ~~Judi
  4. Tinker

    Simple Statements

    Oh Joel, This is a powerful piece in which pain takes center stage. Beautifully sad. ~~Judi
  5. Tinker

    Poetry, prose, and poems

    Sorry, I'm late but welcome to PMO Alemeye. Your piece is very clear. I thought it affirming and thought provoking. Anyone can write a poem, but it takes magic to write poetry. I feel blessed when amongst the hundreds of poems that I have written, one of them crosses over the line and can be called poetry. We just keep writing working toward that end. Very nicely expressed although not all poems are rhymed. Losing the rhyme doesn't guarantee the magic and great poetry is often rhymed. So many scenarios. I really enjoyed reading this. ~~Tinker
  6. Tinker

    Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    to pillow your day white clouds drift slowly above on a soft cool breeze
  7. Last week
  8. dr_con

    Cut short by one syllable

    Thanks Phil for commenting. Yes the intention is darkly humorous and its always refreshing to be reminded that their are americanisms and subculture colloquialisms. The Porcelain is off of, not ground into;-) Maybe the image will help! 😉 https://conjurd.substack.com/p/a-true-and-accurate-account Much appreciation, Juris
  9. badger11

    Cut short by one syllable

    Hi Juris, Not unwrapping this one, but that is not definitive. The opening line is characteristically DR. C, a clarity to hook, but then threads into L2 to make me wonder what's going on. A web search referenced 'poor man's coke', which made L3 darkly comic. Perhaps the 'gear' had been cut with porcelain. Of course, it is the 'one syllable', rather than the narcotics that has me hooked. best Phil
  10. badger11

    The Audition

    Thank you very much Juris and good luck with your new project (I'm still pondering your latest poem!) best Phil
  11. dr_con

    Simple Statements

    Beautiful JJ. Sad, moving, an exceptional piece. Many thanks for this tribute. Juris
  12. JoelJosol

    Simple Statements

    It started with a simple disclosure:'I have a tumor in my lymph nodes.'I looked at you, calculating my words,their tone, their weight, to match yours.'It is not even Stage 1.'I thought I saw something in your eyesthat reminded me of mornings after my wife and Ihad quarreled- a search for hope, a different life.'The chemo is not working. One gallon of liquidwas taken out of my lungs.'So you and this went on like husbands and wives do,except from this you couldn't divorce.I heard your violent coughing,echoing the pain I never knew.Today, a brief statement was sent outto all of us friends,that you passed away 8:30 am-the moment when death did us part.
  13. dr_con

    Home (a Goodbye to Wanderlust)

    Loved it. Can't wait to see future Siren Songs. Found it perfectly crafted and just fun, which is a rather good thing considering the underlying layer of want/loss. J
  14. dr_con

    Fulfilled

    Great message under current circumstances, one I've been trying to embody with uneven success. Ty for the reminder. 😉 J
  15. dr_con

    The Audition

    This is a stunning piece Phil. It evokes a time and place transporting it into the present. A very Time Traveling proficient poem. Love it!
  16. dr_con

    Cut short by one syllable

    This and many other tidbits are appearing on Gate(less) with the accompanying images. Link to signing up in signature line. I'll try to post some new work here occasionally, but am consumed by making Gate(less) my personal showcase - So if you occasionally enjoy my work, I ask you sign up for the 'free' options. Low volume;-) Much Appreciation, Juris d. Ahn and Dr. Con
  17. dr_con

    Cut short by one syllable

    Cut short by one syllable It's incautious to snort Hell's Angel's bathtub speed without health insurance off of white porcelain.
  18. Earlier
  19. badger11

    Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    to forget me not a drop of lavender oil to pillow your day
  20. A. Baez

    Here

    Everybody, I have Tony to thank for the excellent word choice of "encircle" in this poem. I had had "ensorcell" in its place but Tony pointed out that this brings in a potentially complicating factor of animistic magic. On the other hand, "encircle" preserves much of the mystical feeling of the word "ensorcell" while leaving behind its supernatural element. As I've told you before, Tony, the way you achieve lyricism in your own poems seemingly without ever departing from scientific verities is a feature that I much admire. So I'm particularly thrilled to be able to incorporate into this poem a word that you yourself have suggested to me and that embodies this characteristic--for as you well know, this poem is about you. I did not include a dedication on this post because I was interested in seeing whether members would be able to draw the connection on their own. Now that Phil has, and you, Tony, have publicly acknowledged this connection, I am delighted to add a dedication. I enjoyed bringing in Cape Cod for its whimsical rhyme and its introduction of a precisely located, physically and psychologically accessible counterpoint to the preceding "arctic capes," but its proximity to you did not even dawn on me at first, and it was not until later that I realized that it might be close, at which point I looked it up on a map that I confirmed that it was. That sealed the deal on this choice of words for me; there must have been something divine leading me to them. I'm glad you can visualize me ambling in this spot by your side as I can; but as you know, my allusions in this poem to Cape Cod--like my allusions to cold, remote places--are really meant to represent psychic locations within yourself. For I have to believe that you have been drawn to write of chilly, forbidding locales--most of which you've never seen firsthand--as a result of some psychic affinity. As to a literal Cape Cod, I would hardly entreat you to stay with me physically so close to where you already spend most of your time anyway--a place I've never been! I'm interested to know whether the Cape Cod metaphor here is clear to other readers; I rather fear it may not be despite the clear frigid-place-metaphors in the first four lines. You got that right--it's an invitation and a request; I find that the latter are often more persuasive when leavened by the former. 😉 I'm so glad--me too! I've found that invitations and requests are often most persuasive when backed up by charges! 😉 From now on, on this board, I invite you and everyone else to call me Lexi--the pseudonym that you, Tony, have employed here to dedicate a couple of your poems to me. Yours, Lexi
  21. tonyv

    Here

    What a wonderful discussion taking place around this impeccable poem! I thought Judi summed up the mood especially well: I also enjoyed Phil's lead and the author's follow-up re discernable poetic exchanges. The first four lines are "close to home" because "arctic capes" where "ice shelves" abound are such an inherent part of my own poetic "core." (I talk a little bit about this in my topic "Where's Your 'Place?'") "Encircle" is a perfect choice for a word in L2, because that's exactly what stars appear to do, in the night sky, when photographed from earth using long exposure times which yield a "star trail" effect. (I mention star trails in my own poem "Prudhoe Bay.") The second four lines are even closer to home. I live less than an hour's drive from Cape Cod, MA. I've been there plenty, and I can imagine the speaker-poet walking those sandy beaches by my side, "unshod." The last six lines present a synthesis. Acumen and intuition intermingle and offer an "antidote" to this reader's patent "wanderlust." This amounts to an invitation, a question which is also a request: "Say, will you stay, for what a season's worth?" [emphasis mine] How perfectly expressed -- I love it! This line, along with the last line, where the speaker-poet raises the stakes and the call escalates almost to the level of a charge -- "Greet your Calypso; let her stash your sail." -- are my favorite lines in this poem. Ms. Baez, The poem bears no dedication line, but whoever this poem is for is very lucky. In this reader's singular grasp, "Here" lies somewhere between the the 38th and 41st parallel, Atlantic Seaboard, USA. Perfect title, perfect meter, perfect sonnet -- I think this is one of your finest works. Yours, Tony
  22. eclipse

    Identity

    Thanks Tony....
  23. tonyv

    Home (a Goodbye to Wanderlust)

    Thank you, Judi! "Feels right" is good! Tony 🙂
  24. tonyv

    Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    Forget-me-nots thrive where the forgetful forget to forget me not.
  25. tonyv

    Fulfilled

    High on life, Judi? 😁 Not a bad way to be ... Tony 🙂
  26. tonyv

    Identity

    Barry, I like how this one traverses multiple cultures. It's all good, but the last line captures me the most: A captivating work. Tony
  27. eclipse

    Fulfilled

    Life affirming..
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