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In a small room

I buy

 

enough white space

to paint

 

pictures of you

sleeping

 

curling so close

to me

 

I hear all

our love songs

 

of yesterday.

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Aleksandra

Badge, this is very lyrical piece, real gem. It's short and very musical, romantic, and inspiring. I loved the concept and the expressions.

 

Very cute poem.

 

Aleksandra


The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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badger11

'cute' - I like that word!

 

cheers Aleks (where's the coffee?)

 

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goldenlangur

Hi badge,

 

I like the progression from the visual to the sound sense in:

 

I hear all

our love songs

 

The closing detail:

 

of yesterday

 

is quite startling and gives a sense of both the narrator and the reader stepping outside the frame of the moment. The visual images thus take on a particular poignancy.


goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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tonyv

Nostalgia intermingles with a sense of timelessness. I enjoyed the moment, Badge.

 

Tony


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Aleksandra
'cute' - I like that word!

 

cheers Aleks (where's the coffee?)

 

badge

 

Ah, badge, you like the coffee don't you? :) So, it's gone. :) Now, it's time for some reading in nature, without caffeine. You want to know what I am reading? :D Anyway, what about yours, or you prefer tea? :rolleyes: We can have together some, just let me know when and where. :icon_cool:


The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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badger11
gives a sense of both the narrator and the reader stepping outside the frame of the moment

 

what a lovely notion gl of the reader and narrator coming together.

 

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badger11
Nostalgia intermingles with a sense of timelessness. I enjoyed the moment, Badge.

 

Tony

 

Thank you Tony. Amsterdam buys a range of illusions!

 

badge

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badger11
You want to know what I am reading?

 

Yes!

 

badge :wine2:

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Aleksandra

Well, badge, I am reading from the book of poetry: "Above the River" by James Wright, thanks to Tony, who sent me this book as a gift. And in that particular moment of taking that photo, I was reading Twilights, trying to memorize, because I was so jealous on Tony, because he have so many poems memorized, and I don't have any. So, I was practicing and trying, but I don't want to tell the result. :-8)

 

Cheers :wine2:

 

Alek


The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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rumisong
In a small room

I buy

 

enough white space

to paint

 

pictures of you

sleeping

 

 

I really really really like these lines!

 

I find myself liking them standalone- the poem ending here--

 

the rest disconnected a little bit for me, and this is the second time Im seeing how literally I seem to be taking poems these days-- but, for me, if the poet is painting pictures, did he drop his paintbrush and rush over to curl up next to his love? -- what happened? I want to ask-- ugh, this is bothering me about my reading these -- (the other one today was here)

 

its me, not the work, Im sure...

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badger11

I see what you mean Rumi. Thanks for suggesting the option.

 

cheers

 

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Tinker

Wow Badger, Very WC Williams of you. You used the space perfectly and painted quite an image. Really well done, the style fits you.

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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badger11

Kind of you to say so Tink. I guess part of learning the 'craft' is to mimic!

 

all the best

 

badge :wine2:

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