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Summer Pursuits

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David W. Parsley

SUMMER PURSUITS

 

 

Crouched in grass kitten

finds swaying caterpillar,

bites, springs – his own tail.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

unpublished

© David W. Parsley 2011

Parsley Poetry Collection

Edited by David W. Parsley

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Frank E Gibbard

David - a pleasure, hope it does not seem lazy to comment first time on a short one of yours as it is by its nature, form. Suffice to say I have read and appreciated other ones just not got round to commenting. This is a great capture IMO.

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Benjamin

Nicely done Dave. A pleasure to follow the imagery which has a playful feel-good factor about it. B.

 

Perhaps "eyes swaying caterpillar"

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David W. Parsley
Nicely done Dave. A pleasure to follow the imagery which has a playful feel-good factor about it. B.

 

Perhaps "eyes swaying caterpillar"

 

Thanks for the compliment and the suggestion, Benjamin. Also considering "tracks swaying caterpillar." Sticking with the "find" for the moment, because I like the moment of discovery being here. I hope to see a few more come through the critique pipeline. Please check again and see where the other folks helped me take this, when you bring your own eyes back in a few weeks. Meantime, be carerful what you bite. :rolleyes:

 

Best,

Dave

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David W. Parsley
David - a pleasure, hope it does not seem lazy to comment first time on a short one of yours as it is by its nature, form. Suffice to say I have read and appreciated other ones just not got round to commenting. This is a great capture IMO.

 

Hi Frank, I am grateful for the assessment. And glad to hear you like the other works, too. Please feel free to comment as opportunity affords. Like Tinker, I am always open to suggestions to further refine my work.

 

- Dave

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tonyv

Very clever, Dave. Induced an unexpected but much needed smile.

 

Tony

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dr_con

Yes indeed light and brings a much needed smile;-)

 

DC&J

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