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After the rain

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Beyond the mere

blossom promises,

floating upwards,

pillow her eyes.

 

Mary's painting

scented gardens,

with cherry trees

and lily ponds.

 

Her blouse billows

this breezy day,

across the tor

a rainbow sigh.

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Tinker

It isn't easy to write in 4 syllable lines and make the poem sound smooth and unhurried but you seem to have done it. I liked this imagery.

 

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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badger11

Thank you Tink. This was one of those written in times of a writing drought when it is the act of writing rather than poem that is the motivation. Pleased it works though. I always try to remember how Blake could write simply, but with some resonance.

 

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tonyv

... This was one of those written in times of a writing drought when it is the act of writing rather than poem that is the motivation ...

 

That's one approach a poet uses, Badge. The act of writing, "tinkering" with words, has yielded this fine composition.

 

Tony :smile:

 

One question: is the comma after L6 necessary?


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badger11

Yes, I've gone blank...but thankfully I know writing is inevitable...:0)

 

cheers

 

badge

 

comma? I like a pause...

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