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Canoe

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I share a pot of camomile with you

and chat about suicide, a healthy diet,

a poet that died a lunatic. Your scone,

and teasing smile, are sweet with cherry jam.

 

Between the blushing sea and burning sky,

beyond the words rattling in empty spaces,

a canoe glides with natural ease. Its blades

are rippling whispers only I have heard.

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David W. Parsley

Badger, this is another fine piece, deceptive in its apparent simplicity. Your command of language and sound ties 'ah' and 'n' recurrences in the first sentence to the canoe motif - the effect is deft and subtle, the artist's hand invisible. The details elected for inclusion by the poet testify of the moving gift at work, preceding with cherry jam innocence the flame and blush flooding the world; and they, the arrival of annunciation that is mysterious, wholely personal.

 

To borrow a phrase from Franklin, "This is really good."

 

- Dave

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badger11

Cheers Dave. Appreciate your involvement with the words.

 

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dr_con

Badge,

 

Remarkable, brilliant and stunning. Really F___ing good! Enough, Juris & Dr. Con


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Larsen M. Callirhoe

i second Juris & DC's comment effing good alright. the words read so smoothly yet the sound flows like a free flowing stream. just amazing alliteration badge. one man standing ovation for you....

 

victor


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badger11

Wow that is a brimful of encouragement guys!

 

And Juris... there is an influence of yourself in the writing of this. Pleased it connects.

 

Take care both,

 

all the best

 

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