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While Adam sleeps in dreams of apple pie, she rolls

pastry for a tempting treat, baking golden brown

in tropical heat. With time to bathe, unzips her skirt

and spies her lover dozing summer schemes.

An axe lies lazy by his knee, a glass

of cider by the apple tree, and bees

are humming hexagon themes. With prey

to please, she wears his cotton shirt, descends

the stair and loosens three buttons. A snake

uncoils, all sleek and smooth, an hour to tease. She runs

her hand across his shedding skin, unravels cares

with lips and liquid sighs, to gift an eternity

of sin in taste of apple pie.

 

 

 

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original

 

Whilst Adam sleeps in dreams of apple pie, she rolls

a pastry for a tempting treat, baking a golden brown

in tropical heat. With time to bathe, unzips her skirt

and spies her lover dozing summer schemes.

An axe is lying lazy by his knee, a glass

of cider by the apple tree, and bees

are humming hexagon hive themes. With prey

to please, she wears his cotton shirt, descends

the stair and loosens three buttons. A snake

uncoils, all sleek and smooth, an hour to tease. She runs

her hand across his shedding skin, unravels cares

with lips and liquid sighes, to gift all sin in taste of apple pie.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

I like the revision a lot better badge. it is more mystical and alluring and seducive than the original which sounds more apocryphilic (not sure on spelling).

 

victor


Larsen M. Callirhoe

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badger11

Cheers Victor. Tasty apple pie is seductive :0)

 

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David W. Parsley

Hi badge, congrats on the publication of this piece as "Apple." This one really hits the, uhm, sweet spot for this publication's guidelines!

 

- Dave

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