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At the end of the hook a gaudy thing
bobbing in pantomime to trawl her eye
and clasp her lip. She swallows the act
as if a Jacobean player: her love

of theatre never dies. She mimes in roles
of the silent star who fades to grey,
a life escaping lines. She's mouthing the end
of the script and so longing to swim again.

 

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At the end of the hook a gaudy thing
bobbing in pantomime trawls her eye
and clasps her lip. She swallows the act
as if a Jacobean play: her love

of theatre never dies. She rehearses
her role, a silver screen star fading to grey,
a life reeling in lines. She's mouthing the end
of the script, her longing to swim again.

 

 

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revision

 

At the end of the hook a gaudy thing
bobbing in pantomime trawls her eye
and clasps her lip. She swallows the act
as if a Jacobean play: her love

of theatre never dies. She rehearses
her role, her scales clothing old
like a silver screen star fading to grey,
this stage can only bleed a twisted joy.

Above the stream a weeping willow rustles
two faces, a father and son, a line and rod
reeling in life until she's mouthing the end
of the script and longing to swim again.

 

 

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At the end of the hook a gaudy thing
bobbing in pantomime trawls her eye
and clasps her lip. She swallows the act
as if a Jacobean play: her love

of theatre never dies. She swims
through roles, her scales weighing old
like a silver screen star fades to grey.
That tugging is pinging with cathartic joy.

Above the stream a weeping willow rustles
two faces, a father and son, a line and rod
reeling in life until she's mouthing the air
for the end of script, longing to swim again.

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