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The cruelest lines

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Inspired by this:

 

http://poemhunter.com/poem/tonight-i-can-write-the-saddest-lines/

 


Today I can muse the cruelest lines.

Muse, for example, “The dawn is breaking
while the galaxies slumber in the beyond.”

The dawn air shudders on the horizon and moans.

Today I can muse the cruelest lines.
I loved him, but never did he love me.

Through dawns like this one I never held him.
I never kissed him -never,never- under a triumphant sun.

He did not love me yet I loved him.
How could I not have loved the sapphire?

Today I can muse the cruelest lines:
To know I do not have him; to know I never had him.

To see the garish world, made garish without him,
And this fallen verse banished from my soul.

Why should I care he did not love me?
My spirit is cracked and he is not with me.

These are it. In the cosmos there are live beings, in the cosmos.
I am bereft of someone that I never had.

My lines create him as if I could go to him;
I go to him but we are still uncreated.

This same sun rising on him:
He, not of my time, not of my uncreation.

I still love him, es cierto, but how I doubted it!
My verse fought for ink to blur his sight.

Hers. He will be hers. Unlike us, as always.
Their lips. Their bodies. Their bed.

I still love him, es cierto, but perhaps I don't.
Love is eternal and memory is so short.

Each god damn morning like this when I do not hold him
My book is not satisfied that he never held me.

Yes, this is the last pain endured for him.
Yes, this is the first verse written to him.

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Just an exercise, trying to get out of writer's block. Using tips/tricks from a book called The Complete Idiots Guide to Writing Poetry.

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Marti, I'm glad Badge asked this question, because I, too, was wondering why you were workshopping this poem. I've always loved the Neruda poem, and yours is a suitable homage to it.

 

Tony

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Thanks for reading. That Idiot's Guide has some neat exercises, form suggestions/tips, etc. I put this in Workshop and not the main submission portion since it IS a rework, haha.

 

 

Marti, I'm glad Badge asked this question, because I, too, was wondering why you were workshopping this poem. I've always loved the Neruda poem, and yours is a suitable homage to it.

 

Tony

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