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the wedding dress lying
across clean sheets, his shadow
undressing in the mirror,
another champagne to sparkle
yesterday and tomorrow.

 

 

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The black widow awake
under the sheet, the shadow
undressing in the mirror,
another bottle to empty.

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tonyv

Succinct, yet nevertheless intriguing. I'm just relieved there's another bottle. Imagine what it could be like without it!

Tony


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badger11

I don't drink - so, yes I have that life!

 

 

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Tinker

I read the poem without paying attention to the title and didn't get it.  it was a puzzle to me.  Then I looked up and saw the title and the light turned on.   Interesting images, good delivery but something is missing. 

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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badger11

Thanks Tink. I think you're right. Will ponder some more.

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