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An English Breakfast In Frenchman's Garden

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The dawn's dragonflies
skim across the pond,
the quick deft brushwork
dabbing points of light.

He spreads the crust of toast
with thick-cut marmalade,
his children unravel
a ball of knotted twine.

He watches their laughter
take flight around the ponds.
The water lilies gather
in Monet's eyes. He paints.

 

 

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The dawn's dragonflies
skim across the pond,
their quick deft wing work
dabbing points of light.

He spreads the crust of toast
with thick-cut marmalade,
his children unravel
a ball of knotted twine.

He watches their laughter
take flight around the ponds.
The water lilies gather
in Monet's eyes. He paints.

 

 

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The dawn's dragonflies
skim across the ponds,
the quick deft brushwork
dabbing points of light.

A painter spreads his toast
with thick-cut marmalade,
his children unravel
a ball of knotted twine.

He watches their laughter
take flight around the ponds.
Water lilies gather in
Monet's eyes. He paints.

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The dawn's rain shadow
skims across the ponds,
the quick deft brushwork
dabbing points of light.

He spreads the crust of toast
with thick-cut marmalade,
the children unravel
a ball of knotted twine.

He watches their laughter
take flight to the garden.
The waterlilies gather
in Monet's eyes. He paints.

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badger11

Thanks Tony. Always pleased to have a tick for clarity!

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Thank you very much Tink. Pleased the poem conjured a picture of Monet:rolleyes:

all the best

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