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badger11   

revision

The pages of Latin torn from primer books
give joy. The fire is ripe for warming soup.
The boarding school's long gone: the prize pupils
and teachers crucified. A classical text.

There is no soup. Homeless wander around
the Heritage gardens. The Damask roses
perfume the praying hours with colour smiles.
The gardener's mum brews tea over flames.

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The pages of Latin torn from primer books
give joy. The fire is ripe for warming soup.
The boarding school's long gone: the prize pupils
and teachers crucified. A classical text.

There is no soup. Homeless wander around
the Heritage gardens. The Damask roses
perfume somnambulance and smiles.
The gardener's mum brews tea over flames.

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Tinker   

"somnabulance"  really?   Of course I had to look it up.... you couldn't say "sleepwalkers"?   Just teasing but not only did I have to look it up, I couldn't, still can't, say it. Which made reading aloud awkward and the sonics of your poems are always like listening to good music.  

Now that that is over with,  I loved it Badge.  It is tight, musical, (except that word) and classical Blank Verse with a relevant social issue described in a way that seems not so bad because of the setting and then on the other hand the setting makes it seem sadder.  Awesome.

~~Tink

 

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tonyv   

Good revision on an appealing poem. I was curious as to the setting. In the original it could have been northern Europe -- it still could be -- but "perfume the praying hours" made me contemplate even more the notion that this takes place in the middle east. Two stanzas with a relevant/thoughtful, exotic title -- is there any surprise that this poem is very much to my liking?

Tony :wink:

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