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Tinker

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So here is my thought process with original poem and rewrites:

Assignment: Go to Hell                               Rewrite 4 Wed morning

In this waste land of chaos,
a cacophony of cries
and clanging,
barking dogs and banshee
screeches deafens me.

Flashing
strobe lights confuse
and redirect my thoughts
then redirect again. I cannot grasp
and hold
a single concept.

My mind, tangled
in an anchor chain of broken
promises, struggles
to break the surface of clarity.

The endlessness
of this place makes petty peeves
seem like only pesky
flies at a family barbeque.
How I long to return there now.

Assignment: Go to Hell                         Rewrite 3 Wed morning

In this waste land of chaos,
a cacophony of clanging,
barking and banshee screeches
deafens me.
Flashing strobe lights confuse
and redirect my thoughts
then redirect again.  I cannot grasp
and hold
a single concept.

My mind, tangled
in an anchor chain of broken
promises, struggles
to break the surface of clarity.

The endlessness 
of this place makes petty peeves
seem like pesky flies
at a family barbeque.
How I long to return there now.

Assignment: Go to Hell                         Rewrite 2   Tues night

In this waste land of chaos
a cacophony of clanging,
barking and banshee screeches
deafens me.

Flashing strobe lights confuse
and redirect my thoughts
then redirect again.  I cannot grasp
and hold a single concept.

My mind tangled
in an anchor chain of broken
promises, struggles
to break the surface of clarity.

The endlessness of despair
In this place makes petty peeves
seem like a few flies at a family barbeque
how I long to return there.

                                                               Rewrite 1   Tues morning
In a waste land of chaos
a cacophony of clanging metal,
barking dogs and banshee
screeches deafens me.
Flashing strobe lights confuse
and redirect my thoughts
then redirect again.  I cannot grasp
and hold a single idea.
My mind tangled in an anchor
chain of broken promises
struggles to break the surface of clarity.

                                                               First Draft       Monday afternoon
Peace and freedom I seek in a waste land of chaos
dragging heavy chains pulling me down
onto the hot surface of hard cracked  ground
The cacophony is deafening,
shackles scrape my hot flesh
wait, do I have flesh?
I have only my mind
my body was left  behind.
Wandering strobe lights
confuse and redirect thoughts.  
My essence floats unfocused,
burdened with the need to flee.

Assignment
Write list of pet peeves   Write poem as if you were sent to hell which would you dread most?  Here is my beginning thought process.
Pet peeves

  • disrespect
  • complacency
  • cell phones in the theater
  • whiners
  • people unwilling to learn more
  • drivers who cut in and out of traffic
  • spinners, those who won't answer a direct question with direct answer.  Answer the damn question as asked
  • people who say one thing then do another.  Do what you say you are going to do

What torment would I dread most?
What does complacency look like?
What does disrespect sound like?
Abstract to concrete?

In hell would any of those peeves bother me one little bit? 
How do I envision what hell would be like?

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