Jump to content
Poetry Magnum Opus
  • Announcements

    • tonyv

      Registration -- to join PMO ***UPDATED INSTRUCTIONS***   03/14/2017

      Automatic registration has been disabled. If you would like to join the Poetry Magnum Opus online community, use the "Contact Us" link at the bottom of this page and follow these instructions: 1. Check your email (including your spam folder) in a timely fashion for a reply. 2. After you receive a reply, use the "Sign Up" link at the top right corner of the page to create your account. Do this fast. I've lost my patience with people who use the "Contact Us" link to express interest in joining and then don't bother to check their email for a reply and don't bother to join after registration has been enabled. The queue fills up fast with spammers, and I have to spend my time sifting through the rubbish to delete them. The window of opportunity for joining will be short. I will not have my time wasted. If you don't check your email and you don't bother registering promptly, you will find that registration has been disabled and your future requests to join may go ignored. /s/ Tony ___________________ [Registration will only be enabled for a short while from the time your message is received, so please check your email for a reply and register within 12 hours of using the "Contact Us" link. (Be sure to check your spam folder if you don't see a reply to your message.)]
    • tonyv

      IMPORTANT: re Logging In to PMO ***Attention Members***   03/15/2017

      For security purposes, please use your email address when logging in to the site. This will prevent your account from being locked when malicious users try to log in to your account using your publicly visible display name. If you are unable to log in, use the "Contact Us" link at the bottom of the page.
    • tonyv

      Blogs   05/01/2017

      Blogs are now accessible to Guests. Guests may read and reply to blog entries. We'll see how this works out. If Guest participation becomes troublesome, I'll disable Guest access. Members are encouraged to make use of the PMO Members' Promotional Blog to promote their published works. Simply add your latest entry to the blog. Include relevant information (your name or screen name, poem title, periodical name, hyperlink to the site where published, etc). If you have a lot of them and feel you need your own blog, let me know, and I will try to accommodate you. Members are encouraged to continue also posting their promotional topics in the Promotions forum on the board itself which is better suited for archiving promotions.
Terry L shuff

Autumn's Encore

Recommended Posts

Autumn is my favorite season

Natures finest hour.

Kaleidoscope of colors their

No rival can be found.

The rustle and the krackle of

leaves that sacrificed.

Their lives to beautify the paths

We tread to see their best.

The coolness of the air so crisp

The early hours frost.

Renews our spirit and our soul

Anxieties forgot.

And even in the winter months

most bleak and dreary days.

Call for Autumn's Encore

To bow on memories stage.

 

Edited by Terry L shuff
remove commas

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Hi Terry,   Love the "Kaleidoscope of colors "  and I too love the season.  

This is just my opinion so accept or disregard, whatever works for you. Its your poem.  But if this was my poem, I would remove all of the punctuation in the whole poem. Then I would read the poem out loud and only put back the punctuation that is absolutely necessary to make sense of the phrases.  Remember, the end of a line gives a natural pause. There are places you place commas and even a period that make no sense to me.  

This is a nice poem but you cut off its flow with so much unnecessary punctuation.  In poetry think minimal.

~~Tink 

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

I see Tinker's comments re: punctuation, but I'll add a few ideas here. With the seasonal emphasis, this relates well to the tradition of Haiku, yet extended in length. The spirit is there. If that is what you're striving for or a free verse base of short line tendencies (although almost all free verse ends up as grammatical units and cadences: word, phrase, clause), How about an even more minimalist approach -- a la Haiku and the Japanese forms.  So: first line "Autumn my favorite season" or simply "Autumn favorite season"? RE: punctuation, I still think Nature's in line two needs the apostrophe for possessive.  Then "kaleidoscope no rival" And so on. Compress the thoughts.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Please sign in to comment

You will be able to leave a comment after signing in



Sign In Now

×

Important Information

By using this site, you agree to our Guidelines.