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Belshazzar


JoelJosol

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shadows on the river-
marching army trounces
the full-moon.

on the gate,
moon lits the boots
of thousand soldiers. 

from the throne,
host-king falls over
meat and wine.

 

Trying my hand with haiku :-)

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Joel,   Wow,  These are very intense.  Very real.  Very scary.  Ancient history that actually brought to mind contemporary names, Mugabe popped in my head. 

Form Just a note:  haiku,  you use lots of articles that are used minimally in haiku, but then again, eliminating them changes the tone, and that I would not mess with.
#2 L2 typo or is there a reason for "lits" instead of "lights"?

The poem comes first. Form second.  Very effective, emotionally charge poems.  

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