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That sound across the estuary

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There's nothing haunting here
along the lip of sand.
Just a curlew. That curve
of beak will conjure smiles
not ghouls. What comes to mind?
The Clangers, Cyrano,
a dimming of my eyes?
That girl with wavy hair
along the smile of sand.

 

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tonyv

Hmmm. I wonder. Why is this poem so much to my liking? Let's see. Perfect length, perfect choice and application of meter, a sense of place, a bit of mystery, and just out of reach there is an almost tangible sensuality that leaves me craving more. Like an addiction. I like that.

There's nothing haunting here ... Though the poem is in the foreground, it keeps what haunts me -- personally, that is -- right there in the background as if in my peripheral vision. Much of your work has this effect on me.

A lovely lyrical composition. Although the change in title adds a bit of clarity, I prefer "Estuary."

Tony


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David W. Parsley

Not to be contrary, I like the title as it is, since the information does not appear elsewhere in the poem.  It also makes the poem distinctive, eschewing slavish minimalism.  

 - Dave

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Tinker

Hi Badge,. Everything about this poem is perfect, including the title.  I'm working on writing a blog on titles, not that I'm any expert but it is an important detail often overlooked by writers.  The reasons I think your title is so compelling to a potential reader are

  • it gives a point of reference 
  •  It has a sense of mystery
  • the word estuary brings to mind an immediate image in my head

This poem a beautiful lyrical sound to it and the imagery is crystal clear.  I'm glad I waited until after you provided the link to Yeats poem. I've read it before but  now with your poem it has greater meaning.

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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tonyv
7 hours ago, Tinker said:

 ... I'm glad I waited until after you provided the link to Yeats poem. I've read it before but  now with your poem it has greater meaning ...

Found this terrific ebook and downloaded it:

The Wind Among the Reeds (William Butler Yeats)

There are notes at the end.


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Tinker

Thanks Tony, I'm downloading it. Yeats wrote a deliberately beautiful book, its cover designed with embossed gilt, its poems infused with Celtic charm. The Wind Against the Reeds. In the Favorite Poets Forum William Butler Yeats I include several poems of Yeats.

wind.jpg   When I was doing research on Yeats I posted this photo of The Wind Against the Reeds. I thought it interesting that he not only put a lot of work and thought into his poems but also onto the book cover that delivered his poems.

Quite a coup for Badger, being put in the same category as Yeats,  in my opinion The Sound Across Estuary surpasses Yeats' Hanrahan Reproves the Curlew. Badge's poem is more relatable and the imagery is clearer.  Thanks for sharing Badge and for inspiring this conversation with your poem and your link. 

~~Tink 
 


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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badger11
On 01/10/2017 at 6:13 AM, Tinker said:

Hi Badge,. Everything about this poem is perfect, including the title.  I'm working on writing a blog on titles, not that I'm any expert but it is an important detail often overlooked by writers.  The reasons I think your title is so compelling to a potential reader are

  • it gives a point of reference 
  •  It has a sense of mystery
  • the word estuary brings to mind an immediate image in my head

This poem a beautiful lyrical sound to it and the imagery is crystal clear.  I'm glad I waited until after you provided the link to Yeats poem. I've read it before but  now with your poem it has greater meaning.

~~Tink

Thank you very much Tink. You have a very generous heart. I know your country is in a dark place. I know there are Americans, like you, that bring light into world. That matters.

 

take care

 

Badge/Phil

 

 

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