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That African mask, painted with ochre,
threaded with hair sucking on bones,
its lively chatter of jungle tones
ghost the gilded themes of this tour.

The shadows ink across splendid
portraits. These Gainsborough ladies
in genteel gardens -  waterlilies
and roses - lives slavishly scented.

This crowded cafe bubbles with chit-chat,
a broth of varied voices. We've paid
for tea and homemade cake. I check
my 'Diary of a Country Parson'.

What sugared past do we consume
and trust in our comfortable rooms?

 

revision

That African mask, painted with ochre,
threaded with hair sucking on bones,
its lively chatter of jungle tones
ghost the gilded themes of this tour.

The shadows ink across splendid
portraits of gentlemen and ladies
in formal gardens - waterlilies
and roses, lives darkly scented.

What do we celebrate
with sugared tea and homemade cake?

 

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That African mask, painted with ochre,
haunted with hair sucking on bones,
its lively jabber of jungle tones
riddle the margins of this hour.

The shadows ink across splendid
portraits of gentlemen and ladies
in formal gardens - waterlilies
and roses - lives darkly scented.

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Tinker

This is different Badge.  A vivid portrait of what I can only imagine as an observation of wall hangings in a lobby or hallway of a prestigious facility. The African art of course colorfully stands out in an otherwise subdued atmosphere  Nice

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badger11

hi Tink

I recently visited a Georgian country house. Many of these estates were financied by colonial trade. Much of that trade was based on slaves.

all the best

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tonyv

Some nice improvements in the revision. "Chatter" is more appealing, and "tour" adds clarity. The last two lines are the epiphany. The title drew me in; it's a keeper.

Tony


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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badger11

Thanks Tony. One of my output poems - I must write at least one 'output' per month is my rule. In doing so, I may stumble on a poem!

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