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Brown sunlight creeps through slats, around
edges, and tans her naked shoulder.
The smudged stemware on last night's table
observes his restlessness. Away,
where summer lingers, clusters droop
and await patiently the harvest.
He reaches for a glass. She lets him.

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Ooooh sensual Tony.   I love how the glass, the wine and cluster of grapes weave through the action.   This is complex in its simplicity.   Nice, nice, nice.

~~Judi

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Thank you, Judi. Complexity in simplicity is nice. This is my first attempt at an aubade, but I figure it's not necessary for every aubade to be called "Aubade."

Tony :happy:

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I love that you are writing more.    It is so easy to get out of routine.   And I know are such a perfectionist you only want to post a polished finished piece, with the exception of posting in the workshop.    You can post less perfect stuff you know.   Just write. 

~~Judi

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On February 6, 2018 at 9:15 PM, Tinker said:

... You can post less perfect stuff you know.   Just write ...

I'm trying, Judi, I'm trying! :wacko::blush:

Tony :rolleyes:

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On February 8, 2018 at 4:02 PM, badger11 said:

Very much enjoyed this Tony, particularly the acquiescence in the concluding line.

best

Phil

Thanks, Phil. I like that, too. I think there are some layers just in that line: he reaches for the glass, not for her; he reaches for the glass and for her; etc. 

Tony

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12 hours ago, JoelJosol said:

Same appreciation as Tinker once I figured out what stemware is :-)

Thanks, Joel. I figured I'd get specific. Didn't want to use glass/glasses twice in a short poem.

Tony

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