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She switches on the lamp
behind his reading chair,
picks up the Telegraph,
dwells on the vacant space.

The doodled boats he anchored
in margins were so him.
The word's kedging. He'd know.
She leaves it incomplete.

 


Footnote: kedging is a method of turning a ship/boat around

 

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She switches on the lamp
behind his reading chair,
picks up the Telegraph
and notes the empty space.

The anchored boats he'd doodle
in margins were so him.
The word's kedging. He'd know.
Life is so incomplete.

 

 

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She switches on the lamp
behind his reading chair,
picks up the Telegraph
and notes the empty space.

The anchored boats doodled
in margins are so him.
The word's kedging. He'd know.
She leaves it incomplete.

He will be clocking-off -
hurrying from the Ship;
past the wharfs, the commas
of cranes, his ink of places.

 

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She switches on the lamp
behind his reading chair,
picks up the Telegraph
and notes the empty space.

The anchored boats doodled
in margins are so him.
The word's kedging. He'd know.
Life is so incomplete.

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tonyv

Crossword puzzles always frustrated me. I've read that addictive things, whether substances or certain activities (like golf), work with the brain in a way that they deliver just enough reward to make the addict keep coming back for more. I never got that satisfaction from crossword puzzles when often no expected word worked and later it became apparent that the clue was calling for a gerund instead of a more obvious noun. As far as I'm concerned, that works about as well as forced rhyme.

This poem, on the other hand, delights. It leaves enough to the imagination without the reader being conducted to an ungratifying end.

Tony

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badger11

Thanks Tony. I rarely dabble myself, but like you I recognise the addiction - and the refuge! Apologies for messing with that ending, but it was too 'big' for the poem.

best

Phil

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34 minutes ago, badger11 said:

Thanks Tony. I rarely dabble myself, but like you I recognise the addiction - and the refuge! Apologies for messing with that ending, but it was too 'big' for the poem.

best

Phil

I didn't mean your poem had an ungratifying end, I meant exactly the opposite. The poem has a pleasing ending. It's crossword puzzles themselves that leave me unsatisfied when the word they're looking for ends up being something least likely to work with the clue given. 

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tonyv
1 hour ago, badger11 said:

Apologies for messing with that ending, but it was too 'big' for the poem.

Ah, I see now what you did; you posted a revision. I didn't catch that earlier when I replied from my mobile phone. :blush:

In any case, I like it. L8 clarifies things a lot, and the third stanza adds hope that was missing before to picture.

Tony

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badger11

Thanks for taking another look Tony. I felt the exasperation of N., but hadn't provided enough context.

best

Phil

 

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Tinker

Hi Badge, I too have been watching this, grow then shrink.  I felt the loss of the 3rd stanza.  I liked it. 

My thought keeps going back to  The word's kedging    Yes I had to look up kedging but it is the "word's" that bothers me.  I first thought ownership which didn't fit, then finally got to word is.. 

I don't do crosswords either. I never know the words, what is interesting my brother does them daily.  I love him dearly and I enjoy his company and we have so much fun together but my brother for lack of a better word, is dumb. (I say that lovingly and to his face on occasion and he'll agree.) But he knows the words for the puzzles... he could never use them in a sentence however.  I'll bet he would have known kedging if he ran across it on a puzzle though.  The puzzles use those weird words over and over. 

~~Tink

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badger11

Thanks Tink. I struggle with crosswords...especially cryptic ones. But, at the very least, a crossword is a means of keeping the less familiar words in use. I've provided a footnote since kedging can be used in a number of circumstances.

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badge

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tonyv

I much prefer the Word Search. :laugh:

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badger11
11 hours ago, tonyv said:

I much prefer the Word Search. :laugh:

:laugh: agreed

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YarnSpinner

Badger: When I reread it my thoughts were: line 7 & 8... 

The doodled boats he anchored
in margins were so him.
The word's kedging. She knew.
Smiling, she leaves it incomplete.

...but I too, do not spend much time working crossword puzzles.

YarnSpinner

 

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badger11

Thanks YS. I only attempt the easy ones!

cheers

badge

 

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