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Memory Lane

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Tinker

Memory Lane

In a small space,
somewhere inside my head,
obscured from sight
by tangled limbs of thought
and brambles of unfulfilled
dreams, there is a hazy,
lazy lane where memories
of an almost forgotten
past dwell. Sometimes an image,
a touch or taste on my tongue
will take me there.
But I don't linger long.
I prefer the clear path before me.
                        ~~Judi Van Gorder

Prompt, write a 12 line minimum poem titled, Memory Lane.  Frame at the discretion of the poem.

 

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tonyv

This is lyrical, lovely. I totally get the nostalgia. I would drop the last line; I think that part has already been expressed, shown in the penultimate line.

Tony

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David W. Parsley

Agreed, the final line is not only redundant, it dissipates the nuance of what precedes.  Nice insights.

 - Dave

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Tinker

Thanks Tony and Dave, you are right... I have to break myself of that.   I actually won first place with this poem in a WCD contest.
~~Tink
 


 

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Terry L shuff

I visit that place often,too often.

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