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The Box

She blinked at him
as if to say "all is OK".
His numbers 120 over 81
lit up in red on her chest.
Standing vigilant
she continues to guard
ready to ping
if IV drip stops
or his vitals change
causing nurses to scurry.
One called her "the box"
as she was led in a dance
around the hospital room.
I think "Angel" fits her better.
                ~~Judi Van Gorder

Exercise in personification.

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On 4/17/2018 at 7:28 PM, Tinker said:

The Box

She blinked at him
as if to say "all is OK".
His numbers 120 over 81
lit up in red on her chest.
Standing vigilant
she continues to guard
ready to ping
if IV drip stops
or his vitals change
causing nurses to scurry.
One called her "the box"
as she was led in a dance
around the hospital room.
I think "Angel" fits her better.
                ~~Judi Van Gorder

Exercise in personification.

 

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Tinker: You have described it perfectly. In the past 3 years she  "The Box" (Angel) dance by my wife's bedside many...many times.

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Thanks,  My husband is finally is out of there.  He had surgery 2 weeks ago and was supposed to be in the hospital 2 days then home.  Finally yesterday he is out of the hospital and in an acute rehabilitation facility.  He got an infection they couldn't find or control.  He is still not out of the woods but making progress.  He probably won't come home for 20 days.  I hope your wife is doing better.  "Getting old isn't for sissys"  somebody said something like that.

~~Tink

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The tone of the piece reflects how you handled the crisis, Judi. It is positive signalled by the "blink" and the pace of the unraveling of the poem.  I hope that your husband will do fine with all the help he can get plus prayers.

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13 hours ago, Tinker said:

Thanks,  My husband is finally is out of there.  He had surgery 2 weeks ago and was supposed to be in the hospital 2 days then home.  Finally yesterday he is out of the hospital and in an acute rehabilitation facility.  He got an infection they couldn't find or control.  He is still not out of the woods but making progress.  He probably won't come home for 20 days.  I hope your wife is doing better.  "Getting old isn't for sissys"  somebody said something like that.

~~Tink

Sad to read this Tink. Take care my friend.

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Thanks Joel,  Bob is starting to pull out of it and they have him up and walking but that darn fever keeps rearing its ugly head.  He takes one step forward and two steps back.  But he is much improved over this time last week.  

Thanks for the support Badge.  It has been a long haul but we'll come out OK.  With Bob in rehab, I have had sort of a break.  Catching up on sleep, work and whatever.  I visit him a couple of times a day but I have uninterrupted time to myself for the first time in months.  No one needing help in the middle of the night. I slept in this morning and it was heaven. 

~~Tink

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A perfect and moving personification. And glad you have had a break in your challenges. Beautiful piece Tink;-)

Juris

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"Ready to ping." Technology meshed with humanity. Hopeful and loving piece.

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Thanks Marti, just trying to keep writing.  I miss your poems.

~~Tink

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