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              Whitsun

          The bus is late. A queue of anxieties boil
like frenzied peas.



               At low tide

               those dreams
of crustaceans     tango across the sand.



                Hot/Cold

          I'm suspended in kipper time,
salted and smoked. I offer
          distraction with a pink bouquet.
You find your smile. I'm gutted.

 

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     Outside this room chit-chat meanders,
Gulls picnic on savouries and sweets.
           The bus is late. A queue of anxieties boil
like frenzied peas.

           Into my insular eye,  I find that dream
of crustaceans, a tango across sand.
           A wall lizard loiters, distracted
by your lime green blouse.

           I'm suspended in kipper time,
salted and smoked, I offer
          my entrée with greater tact.
You find your smile. I'm gutted.

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Hi Badge,  This is enchanting.   The only way I connect the first stanza with the second and third is reality slipping into daydream.   I love "of crustaceans, a tango across sand."  I can envision sand crabs as they scurry in the wet sand.   

~~Tink

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Pleased you enjoyed Tink - by slipping into the daydream...

all the best

badge

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Include me in the dream. Am curious why you changed the title ...

Tony

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Thanks Tony. My original title on file said 'Heat'. 'Cold' was part of the equation. Anyway the whole does not equal the parts for me so I've made three out of one!

best

Phil

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