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My labrador dreams.
A blackbird sings,
consumed by summer.
Grasses samba across borders.
Exuberance breathes -
flowers a Fauve palette,
Matisse alive and fearless.
In solitude that black spotted leaf
nudges tomorrow.

 

 

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My labrador sleeps.
A blackbird sings 
consumed by summer.
The flower border overflows.
Exuberance dances here -
a Fauve palette,
Matisse alive and fearless.
In solitude that brown leaf
nudges tomorrow.

 

 

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Heat and tears.
There's exuberance here.
Its colour is fearless.
In solitude that brown leaf
nudges tomorrow.

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Tinker

Badge, Very tanka like.    I really like it all but especially,  " in solitude that brown leaf nudges tomorrow."    I never thought of it like that but so true. 

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~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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badger11

Thanks Tink. I find syllabics a useful frame to break away from stress patterns. They provide a net when fishing for words. Once that challenge has been achieved, though in this case I didn't bother much, then I like to break the net and let the words swim! 

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tonyv

I had to look up Fauvism and Henri Matisse to see and fully appreciate the lovely picture you've painted here. Is the stanza below the line an earlier version of the poem?

Tony


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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badger11

Apologies for that Tony. Pleased you enjoyed.

cheers

Phil

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