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Deliver this child who has lost an eye

to a hospital, convey the conflict in a
three minute clip then cut to the adverts.
Child is having a seizure on a hospital bed,
shake out the truth from the political matrix.
On facebook a photograph leaks the blood
from a child's bloody limb onto the pictures
of those killed in war.

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badger11

How truth is conveyed...how trust in that truth undermined...how much truth is valued...cut to the adverts...answers that last question.

good one

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tonyv

Barry, I like your recent war poems. Powerful stuff, along the lines of Black Sabbath's War Pigs.

Peace through superior firepower -- good. Aggression … probably bad.

Tony

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eclipse

Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough..

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tonyv
22 hours ago, eclipse said:

Thanks tony.they were written for a contest. Are they good enough..

You should know my response by now, Barry: "Is the contest good enough for your poem(s)?"

Tony :wink:

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eclipse

Thanks tony for this website...

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Tinker

Hi Barry, Good luck with the contest, it is always nice to know someone is reading your work and contests are a way of getting your work out there, win or lose.  The judging itself is often a matter of preference.   As far as this poem, if I were a judge you'd be a contender.  This poem touched me, it wasn't pretty and it wasn't something I would want to come back to, but it was real. I felt shame in it as if I, somehow, was responsible for this child and failed him.  That's good writing.

~~Tink

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