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JoelJosol

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JoelJosol

I can feel the heat of the sun but where is the warmth of love? 
I can hear the birds chirping but where is the sound of joy?
People all around wear their widest smiles but where is my happiness?

How can I stretch my lips to feign a smile when it is my mind that is stiff? 
How can I be in a crowd, intermixing shadows, but feel so alone?
Why from all the mobile calls  I only get busy tones

when all I need is someone with their arms around me,
to shelter me from this loneliness?
 

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dr_con

Beautiful existential summary of sadness and loneliness I'm particularly taken with 

4 minutes ago, JoelJosol said:

Why from all the mobile calls  I only get busy tones

Juris

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JoelJosol

Dr_con, thanks for the feedback. I am glad that the poem was successful to carry across its message.

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Tinker

Joel,  The lonilness is palpable. Each line a gem. 

~~Tink

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FrasMac

Strong writing, and distictly contemporary. I struggle to be such, hence admire those who can do it this well.

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tonyv

I agree with the others, Joel, in that this is very good and re the contemporary feel. I think the first line is my favorite. After all, without an atmosphere to temper its effect, sunlight is only … radiation.

Tony

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JoelJosol

Thank guys. December is such a merry season that loneliness would be such a contrast. 

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