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badger11

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badger11

The sign reads permit holders only.
The cormorant winters here, spreads
wings, perches on the sign. An angler
stands at the other end of the pond,
waist high in water. I hurry past,
gloved and scarfed, not looking
for light in the tempting shadows.
My dad spent his Sunday's fishing.

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Tinker
11 hours ago, badger11 said:

The cormorant winters here, spreads
wings, perches on the sign.

Hi badge,  I see this vividly. You set the scene, and the emotion comes alive.  This little poem says so much.  

~~Tink

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badger11

Thank you very much Tink. Pleased the poem works for you.

best

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tonyv

I like when a title contributes significantly to a poem and isn't just incidental. In this case, the title gives insight into the speaker's frame of mind and enhances the whole picture.

The sign's poster is unlikely to relent. And good luck getting the waterfowl to winter elsewhere; it will always return. The speaker seems intent on avoiding that all too often inevitable course of becoming like one's parents. He hurries past and stubbornly resists looking for "light in the tempting shadows." Nevertheless, he recalls his roots, as is evident in the last line.

Nicely framed!

Tony

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badger11

hi Tony,

          I don't worry too much about a reader connecting that closely to a writer's intention because there are so many reasons why this doesn't happen. However, I am always delighted when this does happen! Thank you very much.

all the best

Phil

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