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This Saturday's a rugby day for most,
the paths as empty as Aberystwyth
on dry Sundays. We trudge beside a river
busy with Dippers squabbling for mates and nests.
It makes a change with no one about I said.
The mud is squelchy, well-trodden. Waterfalls
thunder like the Arms Park on match day.
Or anger like our Baptist minister
glaring at his thirsty flock. There's a dead sheep
across the water, headless. It spooks us both.
In these lichen-coated oak, where air dampens
the moss bright stone, a breath of the old ways
whispers myth. Daft, I know. Such places gather belief.
That day the Barbarians beat the All Blacks,
a tribe witnessed the greatest try ever scored,
and we hurried home to watch the Baa-Baas.
Got drunk. The hangovers herded a quiet flock,
even the minister's sermon was whispered.

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tonyv

This takes me to yet another fascinating place. The setting is present day, albeit there's that subtle yet ever-present "breath of the old ways." The narrative delivers a thrilling sense of unease, almost like what a tourist might have felt during a brief stay in Summerisle ("The Wicker Man").

I never thought of Baptists existing, much less having origins outside the United States. Shows how much I know. :rolleyes:

Tony 😀


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dcmarti1

Agree with Tony. Past and (fairly recent) present mesh in this poem. It made me sad to know they have angry Baptists, too.

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badger11
On 3/17/2019 at 4:55 PM, tonyv said:

This takes me to yet another fascinating place. The setting is present day, albeit there's that subtle yet ever-present "breath of the old ways." The narrative delivers a thrilling sense of unease, almost like what a tourist might have felt during a brief stay in Summerisle ("The Wicker Man").

I never thought of Baptists existing, much less having origins outside the United States. Shows how much I know. :rolleyes:

Tony 😀

Thanks Tony. I'm too superstitious to watch Wicker Man! I was wondering if this was too local. Pleased it does translate.

Phil

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badger11
19 hours ago, dcmarti1 said:

Agree with Tony. Past and (fairly recent) present mesh in this poem. It made me sad to know they have angry Baptists, too.

I once had to visit a number of churches in Aberystwyth for an essay - the Baptist was 'hell and damnation', but the congregation had a good voice in the singing!

best

Phil

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Tinker

I could read poetry like this poem all day.   The clarity, the amazing and unique imagery move me.  And the connection to ancient days, not daft at all.  I caught my breath at:             

"In these lichen-coated oak, where air dampens
the moss bright stone, a breath of the old ways
whispers myth. Daft, I know. Such places gather belief."

This is what turns beautiful words into poetry.

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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badger11

Thank you very much Tink. I think the section you quoted may be the future re-write of the poem.

all the best

Phil

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