• Announcements

    • tonyv

      Registration -- to join PMO ***UPDATED INSTRUCTIONS***   03/14/2017

      Automatic registration has been disabled. If you would like to join the Poetry Magnum Opus online community, use the "Contact Us" link at the bottom of this page and follow these instructions: 1. Check your email (including your spam folder) in a timely fashion for a reply. 2. After you receive a reply, use the "Sign Up" link at the top right corner of the page to create your account. Do this fast. I've lost my patience with people who use the "Contact Us" link to express interest in joining and then don't bother to check their email for a reply and don't bother to join after registration has been enabled. The queue fills up fast with spammers, and I have to spend my time sifting through the rubbish to delete them. The window of opportunity for joining will be short. I will not have my time wasted. If you don't check your email and you don't bother registering promptly, you will find that registration has been disabled and your future requests to join may go ignored. /s/ Tony ___________________ [Registration will only be enabled for a short while from the time your message is received, so please check your email for a reply and register within 12 hours of using the "Contact Us" link. (Be sure to check your spam folder if you don't see a reply to your message.)]
    • tonyv

      IMPORTANT: re Logging In to PMO ***Attention Members***   03/15/2017

      For security purposes, please use your email address when logging in to the site. This will prevent your account from being locked when malicious users try to log in to your account using your publicly visible display name. If you are unable to log in, use the "Contact Us" link at the bottom of the page.
    • tonyv

      Blogs   05/01/2017

      Blogs are now accessible to Guests. Guests may read and reply to blog entries. We'll see how this works out. If Guest participation becomes troublesome, I'll disable Guest access. Members are encouraged to make use of the PMO Members' Promotional Blog to promote their published works. Simply add your latest entry to the blog. Include relevant information (your name or screen name, poem title, periodical name, hyperlink to the site where published, etc). If you have a lot of them and feel you need your own blog, let me know, and I will try to accommodate you. Members are encouraged to continue also posting their promotional topics in the Promotions forum on the board itself which is better suited for archiving promotions.
Tinker

a July 4th xiaoshi and haiku

6 posts in this topic

a July 4th xiaoshi and haiku

Gathering

tangy taste of barbeque
sweet corn drips butter
taste of love
shared with friends
------------- --jvg

new neighbors
embraced by old friends
our circle expands
------------- ---jvg

 

I am still playing with verse form. Well this isn't really a verse form but a "subgenre" from the 1920s of Chinese poetry called xiaoshi which I believe means "small poem" (shi = poetry and xiao = little, diminutive or small). The xiaoshi should be fragmented with minimal explanation, seemingly unrelated images and little indication of cause and effect.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Hi Tink,

 

Two great poems to mark your experience of a special day! Never tried a xiaoshi. You make it seem so effortless!

 

Warmth and joie de' vivre come across in both the xiaoshi and the haiku/senryu.

 

 

goldenlangur

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Nice work Tink, I admire you how good you are with all of those forms. You are never tired with trying. Seems you are not lazy as me icon_biggrin.png . The poems works so well and that form I never met before, at least that title of the form xiaoshi But I like how it sounds and looks.

 

Thank you for sharing this wonderful work with us

 

Aleksandra

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Thank you gl, these small poems were a reaction to the day.

 

Aleks, thank you. The xiaoshi really isn't a form but a style of writing. It doesn't have the restrictions of form. I am glad you enjoyed my small poems.

 

~~Tink

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Tinker wrote:

 

Gathering

 

tangy taste of barbeque

sweet corn drips butter

taste of love

shared with friends

 

new neighbors

embraced by old friends

our circle expands

For me, the third line of the xiaoshi has a double meaning. It seems to refer to both the food and the atmosphere of the event.

 

I like the last line of the haiku. It resonates with hospitality.

 

Tony

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

new neighbors

embraced by old friends

our circle expands

 

 

the first line has the cause

second line has the act

and the third line has the consequence

 

 

excellent orientation of words and rhythm and it has diversifies with the feelings of belongingness!

 

 

and your first xiaoshi makes me hungry!

icon_biggrin.png

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Please sign in to comment

You will be able to leave a comment after signing in



Sign In Now