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The sign promises a lakeside view.
It is a pond. A tearful glint from mines.
The cafe offers filter or instant,
but no cappuccino. The girl's eager,
brings a toasted teacake to our table
because 'it is better hot'. Butter melts.
Her mum has picked bluebells to fill vases.
Spring stutters a breeze in the willows,
the willow warblers pulse leaves.
There's that trembling for beginnings.
Those blossoms nest in our eyes.

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The sign promises a lakeside view.
It is a pond. A watery glint from mines.
The cafe offers filter or instant coffee,
but no cappuccino. The girl's eager,
brings a toasted teacake to our table
because 'it is better hot'. Butter melts.
She has picked bluebells to fill vases.
Spring stammers a breeze in the willows,
the willow warblers pulse leaves.
There's that thirst for beginnings.
Those blossoms nest in our eyes.

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tonyv

Much mundanity, but that's a good thing; it's such a long road to pure, unadulterated wisdom. Even so, this waitress has me on the verge of becoming a serial killer: "It's better when it's hot?!?" Who cares?!?!? Does she know how much I adore her????? Always, there's that other; yea, "those blossoms nest in 'our' eyes." It just better not be gloomy out! There better be a blueskyhighpressuredome! Peace.

Tony


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badger11

hi Tony

Just youthful enthusiasm to reflect the hope of a blue sky future.

best

phil

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David W. Parsley

Phil, I find this one particularly appealing.  It feels innocent (despite the fraudulent advertising that attracted the narrator to this place.)  The simple pleasures are given airy voice.

Thanks,

 - Dave

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badger11

Thanks Dave. You've keyed into the heart of the poem.

all the best

Phil

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