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I've been drinking, looking at pictures
of your village. I'm an alcoholic,
thanks to you and your village. 
I remember pizza -- square, 
thick-pan New York style slices
at the mall and then a movie,
something we both really wanted to see.
And then there was Hürth, in autumn -- modern
apartments leading us to Columbus Day --
but it's too late. You're a lesbian.
It's much too late for me. Really,
we are out of mind and pocket.
And all the poems, movies, and sculptures
dedicated, not to you, but me.


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eclipse

great narrative -reminds me of Bukowski

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tonyv
2 hours ago, eclipse said:

great narrative -reminds me of Bukowski

Thank you, Barry! That's high praise for two reasons: 1. coming from you, and 2. Bukowski. 😄

I was sitting around yesterday and wanted to write a poem quickly. This one was probably the fastest one I ever wrote, at 30 minutes max: fifteen minutes pen to paper, then another fifteen minutes at the keyboard, mostly just messing with line breaks. 

I had made a second topic about Robert Lowell in Favorite poets. He was proloific, and I started off wanting to emulate him. Obviously, this isn't as erudite as his work, but Bukowski ... hadn't considered that. Thank you, again.

Tony 😎


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I was sitting around yesterday and wanted to write a poem quickly. This one was probably the fastest one I ever wrote, at 30 minutes max: fifteen minutes pen to paper, then another fifteen minutes at the keyboard, mostly just messing with line breaks. 

I'm very pleased to read this. I believe such poems don't take '30 minutes' to write, but are rather an outcome of years of living with poetry.

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I've been drinking, looking at pictures
of your village. I'm an alcoholic,

That's a devastating opening.

best

Phil

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Tinker
On ‎7‎/‎10‎/‎2019 at 3:33 PM, tonyv said:

I've been drinking, looking at pictures
of your village. I'm an alcoholic,

Hi Tony,  I agree with Badger, this opening numbed me.  I didn't want to respond to it.  It hurt just to read it.  I know, I am not to assume the poet is the narrator but it sounds so honest.  I wanted to cry.

15 hours ago, badger11 said:

I believe such poems don't take '30 minutes' to write, but are rather an outcome of years of living with poetry.

And I agree again with Badge, and think his quote above is genius as is your poem.

~~Judi


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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18 hours ago, badger11 said:

I'm very pleased to read this. I believe such poems don't take '30 minutes' to write, but are rather an outcome of years of living with poetry.

Phil, I'm super excited to read your thoughts on this. I didn't think anyone would like or be enthusiastic about this poem, nor had I considered the possibility that its source could be a wellspring. Thank you for your encouraging reply.

Tony


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3 hours ago, Tinker said:

Hi Tony,  I agree with Badger, this opening numbed me.  I didn't want to respond to it.  It hurt just to read it.  I know, I am not to assume the poet is the narrator but it sounds so honest.  I wanted to cry. 

Judi, I'm sorry I didn't mean to cause anxiety or alarm. When it comes to seemingly autobiographical elements, to the fact to fiction ratio in the literal or metaphorical, please be assured that I personally am okay. Thank you for your kindness, for your considerate reply.

Tony :happy:


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