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rust

 

climbing steps to temple

rusty knees complain

while snow capped crown

gracefully bows low in gratitude

--Judi Van Gorder

 

 

 

 

An old one revised, revision inspired by Brendan's Mono no Aware

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Wow Tinker, this is short and powerful. When I saw the title I guessed that it must be some inspiration by Brendan's poem. I read what you wrote there about Japanese and saba or rust of time. That was inspiring for me.

 

This poem captures with its own spirit and imagery. Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

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I think it captures the spirit of sabi, Tinker. As they say, rust never sleeps. We can only hope to outlast it. There's a wisdom in the "snow capped crown" that bears witness to this fact.

 

Tony

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Tinker,

 

A great little piece- pure description=pure emotion- well titled, well wrought just plain fun...

 

Excellent Work!

 

DC&J

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