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Tinker

Deprived

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Deprived

 

Slogging up through the muck

weighted by wet earth

and bog slime

my eyes dart behind leaden lids

seeking answers to vanquish

the images that clog my thoughts

and hold sleep hostage.

---------------------- ---jvg

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Ah, Tinker, I hope everything is ok. In my experience, sleeplessness (like writer's block) can be the result of worry -- the images that clog my thoughts. Usually I can't get to sleep in this condition. Perhaps the narrator does sleep, but the sleep is not satisfying, because she is plagued by nightmares?

 

Tony

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I'm fine Tony but I haven't been a good sleeper for many years. I thought I was good with 4 to 5 hours and programed myself to get up and do something once I wake. And you are right, stresses of the day seem to need ironing out at 3am. But that can just become habit not really anything wrong.

 

I am on a mission, I am committed to get more sleep. My doctor says that lack of sleep is what is making me fat. So I am on a new diet of 8 hours sleep each night... I expect to lose 10 pounds by next month . icon_bounce.gif

 

~~Tink

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Ah Tinker how I am so sorry to hear this. I hope you will get better. Get well soon and yes if you can lose the weight. And I know how that feels icon_rolleyes.gif And yes the sleeping is so important for that mission.

 

Well expressed poem Tink.

 

Take care!

 

Aleksandra

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I hope you are doing well with everything tink. Its good to read from you. And sleeplessness is close to heart for I am a light sleeper myself. Well expressed my friend.

 

Keep them coming!

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i don't sleep well either. i have many restless nights because of insominia

 

victor

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Hi Tink,

 

It's been a while since I've read your work and this has been worthwhile waiting for! Vivid imageries makes palpable your torturous struggle to sleep. One feels you've weighed each word for impact and how effortlessly (unlike sleep!) the poem flows. Particularly love these lines:

 

Tinker wrote:

 

...

weighted by wet earth

and bog slime

my eyes dart behind leaden lids

....

---jvg

 

 

"sleep" held hostage has a certain resonance.

 

 

 

As a fellow sleep "deprived" sufferer, your poem certainly spoke to me.

 

goldenlangur

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