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Tinker

Something for Halloween

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Third Dimension by Judi Van Gorder (a Quaterion)

 

Forgotten in a tight airless attic,

a thing that was to prove problematic,

a Halloween reflective diorama

in reenactment of a psychodrama.

 

The shoebox, webbed and painted black,

a tiny coffin's cedar lid drawn back,

inside a body stiff in death, an axe

imbedded in the head, a final tax.

 

A challenge to create this poematic

with ghoulish display in frightful panorama.

The sounds with screeching tone, elegiac

and words don't always tell the lonely facts.

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i liked it...

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Needing a bit of clarification of this an intriguing one for me Tink. I'll reserve comment. Did spot a wee typo embedded not impedded I think.

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Tinker, I get the picture of no one using this item anymore. Forgotten and lonely gave them away for me. But you did not offer us insight why it was problematic :-)

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Hi Tink, enjoyed the form and mood, the aura of language. If you decide to revise, another stanza to shed some oblique light on some of the questions above, would retain the mystery and tie it down just a bit.

 

P.S. Is the form quaterion, or quaternion (a mathematical form for describing moving bodies with six degrees of freedom)?

 

Enjoyed!

- Dave

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