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Tinker

Shift Change #9 Poem a Day

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Shift Change

 

Hard hats and sediment-smudged

cheeks move with passing nod

to and from the smoke stained

brick compound where they labor

for their family’s roof and supper.

 

Rolling waves of inky smut sift

from commercial chimneys

to be sucked into the pulsing pink

organs of its citizens

before drifting into the clouds.

 

Consumers supplied, profits partitioned,

labor exploited

and the universe ignored.

-------------- ~~Judi Van Gorder

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Best one yet for April. "Pulsing pink organs", now that is imagery.

 

Maybe consumers "cheated"? But that lets my Socialism shine through, haha. :)

 

An intense poem.

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Hard hats and sediment-smudged

cheeks move with passing nod

to and from the smoke stained

brick compound where they labor

for their family’s roof and supper.

 

love the solidity of those lines Tink

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Thanks Marti, I was playing with symbolism.

 

Hi Badge, I am impressed you picked up on the image, the lines like the brick building. Thanks for commenting.

 

~~Tink

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