eclipse Posted October 22, 2014 Share Posted October 22, 2014 Ghosts are whispering through cracks in memory’s Glass, telling stories that conflict, outside rain Is disguised as snow, my history Is concealed by decay. Death has been vain Altering costumes contantly-with flames masked as Tears, he uses dreams like a watchtower sweeping Graveyards for the newly deceased to amass Them like a collection of suits waiting To be worn by those ready to be born. I Existed passively in life like a paper Plane left and slowly death revealed his wry Disguise as a pilot then a folder Of paper making a mask –the reapers Tears burn. A grave is the final mask I will wear. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 22, 2014 Share Posted October 22, 2014 Certainly seasonal;-) I found this vision of Limbo, to be fascinating, if a bit bleak, still some stunning images. Enjoyed on a rainy october day;-) Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted October 22, 2014 Share Posted October 22, 2014 I like your poem: it made me think of William Blake's biblical picture of "Death On A Pale Horse". Of how such personifications have survived through pantheons of ancient gods and the intolerances of monotheism. For man has always nurtured a propensity for twisting 'veils' of imagination relating to his fate...And whether or not there is life after death. I also thought of "Dan Dare, Pilot Of The Future," from 1950s radio, whose alien protagonist, "The Mekon" had a huge, highly developed cranium, stuffed with superior knowledge, but supported only by a puny physique. Perhaps that is where the burgeoning mask of hi-tech imagination is leading our progeny. Though I recall an old wartime saying that, "a convoy is only as fast as it's slowest ship." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 27, 2014 Share Posted October 27, 2014 my history Is concealed by decay. Had the intended effect of making me maudlin. Great use of near-rhyme here, too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted November 19, 2014 Author Share Posted November 19, 2014 link to actor reading poem-https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9t4eDwIiRDA Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted November 23, 2014 Share Posted November 23, 2014 Yeah, I like this one, Barry. Very atmospheric. The image of personified Death is disturbingly familiar and alien at the same time, iconic. (I like Geoff's commentary above.) Like dc, I like the use of assonance and slant rhyme, enjambment. And the recorded reading is well done. An enjoyable experience. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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