Benjamin Posted December 15, 2016 Share Posted December 15, 2016 cold winter solstice shadows roam amongst the muted sentinels of shriven trees and icicles within a world of monochrome and cherubs in their pre-fab class sing carols for a new-born boy release on air a childish joy that warms the mist and frozen grass makes frosty tears melt in my eyes and wish all woes and worldly pains could be absorbed in their refrains where innocence and goodness lies then like a virus be set free to flood the world with harmony Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 15, 2016 Author Share Posted December 15, 2016 Following a concert featuring happy five to seven year old children of multi-ethnic backgrounds. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 16, 2016 Share Posted December 16, 2016 Uplifting Geoff pre-fab class - unfortunately the UK still invests in bombs all the best badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 19, 2016 Author Share Posted December 19, 2016 Thanks badge. Pleased you recognized the inference of priorities in that phrase. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted December 24, 2016 Share Posted December 24, 2016 Uplifting, per badger, is 100% correct. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted January 4, 2017 Share Posted January 4, 2017 Very nicely done! And indeed a poem which uses 'Shriven' correctly, makes me smile with glee, even before the uplifting Harmony! ;-) Nice! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted January 8, 2017 Share Posted January 8, 2017 Hi Geoff, I like this four-foot sonnet. It suits the holiday and the event with that shortened step. Nice use of irony without losing the sincere sense of hope. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted January 26, 2017 Author Share Posted January 26, 2017 Thanks guys your comments are much appreciated. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 6, 2017 Share Posted March 6, 2017 Uplifting, hopeful -- that's my takeaway, too. The poem itself has the musicality of a carol, and everything fits from content to form. When I read this I am transported somewhere I have never been, almost like living in (while also benefiting from) a renaissance. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted March 8, 2017 Author Share Posted March 8, 2017 Thank you Tony. Your time is much appreciated. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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