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badger11

And this is what I am hiding from...

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revision

the black widow awake
within damp sheets, the shadow
undressing in the mirror,
another bottle to empty
yesterday and tomorrow.

 

 

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The black widow awake
under the sheet, the shadow
undressing in the mirror,
another bottle to empty.

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Succinct, yet nevertheless intriguing. I'm just relieved there's another bottle. Imagine what it could be like without it!

Tony

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I read the poem without paying attention to the title and didn't get it.  it was a puzzle to me.  Then I looked up and saw the title and the light turned on.   Interesting images, good delivery but something is missing. 

~~Tink

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Thanks Tink. I think you're right. Will ponder some more.

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