Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 louder than drum beatsyour harsh words repeat in my head leaving me hollow leaving me hollow like a drum your good-bye poem I'm so glad to see Tinker again. I've learned a lot from her polishing my Haiku translation. If I happen to have made some progress in writing haiku, you know whose help I've got from. Tony, the line "your good-bye poem" really hurts. your good-bye poem is poison. the world won't be the same again. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Thanks for the kind words Lake..... the same again as in the beginning starting over Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 the same againas in the beginning starting over starting over closer than a similie tighter than a metaphor Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 starting overcloser than a similie tighter than a metaphor tighter than a metaphor our grasp of hands, crossing this rope bridge goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 starting overcloser than a similie tighter than a metaphor tighter than a metaphor our grasp of hands, crossing this rope bridge goldenlangur "this rope bridge", great image. this rope bridge - my heart swings in the air Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 "this rope bridge", great image. this rope bridge - my heart swings in the air Thank you Lake And a most appropriate response you've posted! It is quite unnerving! in the air smell of orange blossoms memories of you goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 in the airsmell of orange blossoms memories of you memories of you grow stronger as autumn deepens Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 memories of yougrow stronger as autumn deepens as autumn deepens how loud the morning traffic - bare trees goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 memories of yougrow stronger as autumn deepens as autumn deepens how loud the morning traffic - bare trees goldenlangur how loud the morning traffic drives me insane nothing like a cup of coffee Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 how loud the morning trafficdrives me insane nothing like a cup of coffee Brilliant vic nothing like a cup of coffee after a night of winds - morning sun goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 hi GL, i couldve said bare trees whistle in the wind leaves sing to me moring sun morning dew the sun rises in the east Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 moring sun morning dew the sun rises in the east vic, it's fine whichever line you take. Good to read your haiku the sun rises in the east but how short its journey another dusk goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 the sun rises in the east but how short its journey another dusk another dusk birds back to their nests a lone traveler Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 (edited) another dusk birds back to their nests a lone traveler a lone traveler Whispering to the monsoon A tale of deception Edited June 1, 2009 by Bloodyday Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 (edited) a lone travelerWhispering to the monsoon A tale of deception a tale of deception in these eyes without words goldenlangur Edited June 1, 2009 by goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a tale of deceptionin these eyes without words without words without rhymes poems dream of lifeless smiles RoNy in Melancholy! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 without wordswithout rhymes poems dream of lifeless smiles RoNy in Melancholy! Sympathy RoNy - but how poetic your melancholy! poems dream of lifeless smiles the valley and the sun in fog goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 1, 2009 Author Share Posted June 1, 2009 poems dream of lifeless smilesthe valley and the sun in fog goldenlangur in fog a war between angels and demons - captivity. Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 in foga war between angels and demons - captivity. captivity without the car radio evening rush hour goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 captivitywithout the car radio evening rush hour evening rush hour once you sit beside catching dreams like fireflies…. RoNy tastes tears Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 evening rush houronce you sit beside catching dreams like fireflies…. RoNy tastes tears catching dreams like fireflies that reflect Rony’s tears a bright moon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 catching dreams like firefliesthat reflect Rony's tears a bright moon a bright moon Blunders so stained lake dreams of shiny beauty RonY mutes Symphony Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a bright moonBlunders so stained lake dreams of shiny beauty Excellent response Lake! lake dreams of shiny beauty memories of Orion this starless night goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 lake dreams of shiny beauty memories of Orion this starless night Thanks Golden. I'm just recycling Rony's words. this starless night makes no difference to him- a blind man Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 this starless nightmakes no difference to him- a blind man It takes a certain knack to do that Lake! You're being modest! a blind man still feels the morning sun goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 1, 2009 Author Share Posted June 1, 2009 a blind manstill feels the morning sun Come on people cheer up . Rony, come on, smile the morning sun falls silent keeps the secret Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a blind manstill feels the morning sun Come on people cheer up . Rony, come on, smile the morning sun falls silent keeps the secret Thanks Lake, Goldenlangur, Alek. i am trying and this is the least i could do! keeps the secret the sun behind the thunder -cloud cries RoNy, dreaming Spring! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 keeps the secretthe sun behind the thunder -cloud cries RoNy, dreaming Spring! cloud cries then spring smiles, how beautiful a singing bird! (Learned from Golden's "how swiftly/they're gone") Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 cloud criesthen spring smiles, how beautiful a singing bird! You're very generous Lake. How well this train is chugging along a singing bird on the bare cherry tree the cat watches goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a singing birdon the bare cherry tree the cat watches the cat watches a mouse, unaware of a dog behind Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 the cat watchesa mouse, unaware of a dog behind a dog behind a pile of newspapers - morning headline goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a dog behinda pile of newspapers - morning headline morning headline printed in bloody red weeping flowers Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 morning headlineprinted in bloody red weeping flowers weeping flowers - a bouquet by a tree on the highway goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 weeping flowers -a bouquet by a tree on the highway on the highway tinkling jingling dancing queen tears unseen...... RoNy sheds debts! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 on the highway tinkling jingling dancing queen tears unseen...... RoNy sheds debts! tears unseen in the dark - a burnt candle Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 tears unseen in the dark - a burnt candle Beautiful!, Lake. a burnt candle among unused plates - last dinner goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a burnt candleamong unused plates - last dinner last dinner never participate recalling your songs.................. RoNy sounds Cr@Zy! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 last dinnernever participate recalling your songs.................. RoNy sounds Cr@Zy! The creed of a poet is madness of sorts recalling your song even the moon weeps Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 recalling your songeven the moon weeps weeps then smiles the changing weather Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 weepsthen smiles the changing weather Your haiku keeps getting better and better, Lake! the changing weather how like your mood every morning goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Your haiku keeps getting better and better, Lake! the changing weather how like your mood every morning goldenlangur Lake writes tremendous, does he know? i think he should know! every morning while jasmine smiles in foggy sunshine rONy shivers alone! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 every morningwhile jasmine smiles in foggy sunshine rONy shivers alone! Golden and Rony, your words made me blush. In fact, Golden's composed wisdom and Rony's unrestrained mind are all inspiring. Thanks! in foggy sunshine how beautiful a blooming camellia Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 in foggy sunshinehow beautiful a blooming camellia a blooming camellia a little madness in air -tears disappear! rONy hEeaRS WhIspERs! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 a blooming camelliaa little madness in air -tears disappear! rONy hEeaRS WhIspERs! Great exchanges here Lake and RoNy tears disappear with Orion at dawn - another day goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 1, 2009 Author Share Posted June 1, 2009 tears disappearwith Orion at dawn - another day another day another destiny. Pandora box. Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 another dayanother destiny. Pandora box. Pandora box. remembering Lara croft saving the world RoNy exiles smiles! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Pandora box.remembering Lara croft saving the world RoNy exiles smiles! Love your little notes, RoNy - gives this train a certain air of fun saving the world we need words not guns Thinking of the Mumbai victims. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 saving the world we need words not guns not guns but spears used in primitive times Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 not gunsbut spears used in primitive times in primitive times a different race the enemy goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 in primitive timesa different race the enemy the enemy or the friend - transformable Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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