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Very well composed, Barry. I've read it numerous times, and it's addictive. Each time I want to read it again.
I always like when onomatopoeia is mentioned in a poem. It never gets old. The two verse set-up is perfect with the stanza break coming just at the right time when reading out loud (i.e. for taking a breath) and also for thought.
There's nothing superfluous. Some of my favorite excerpts are ... the male / grips the gift of a fish to his mate and the reference to "the intimacy of otters." Also, The night is arguing with itself and the line break after "snap" are especially to my liking, snap being a word that for me invokes the expression "cold snap," yet in this case it drops to "of thunder" in the next line, followed with "perhaps." Nice work.
Brief winter sun of the flashing king streaking
waters that are waiting for wings. Ears are tricked
by the wind's onomatopeia, kingfisher's colors
are streaked across the moon's shining spear.
Snow arrives winter is cutting its hair. I wonder
if the stream leaves white footprints after walking
in a dream to catch the moons blade wearing a tear.
There are blue glints, the kingfisher's courtship, the male
grips the gift of a fish to his mate. The intimacy
of otters as they stitch sharing the chalk's white thread,
the needle's eye widens as days lengthen. Somewhere
in chalk, there is a cache of each fish taken and every
cloud that passes.The night is arguing with itself, the snap
of thunder, bolts of lightning are its tears perhaps. Summer
clouds are slippers for angels.
Thank you Tony-- your presence and input here is much appreciated.
I find it poetically fascinating how the senses work in conjunction with the imagination. Most will have never heard of the word – but all will be familiar with imagery in the embers of a fire: cloud formations, and more famously, faces on the Moon and Mars, or even religious depictions in day to day objects. Perceptions of things that are perhaps uniquely and psychologically relevant to each of us. Kindest regards, Geoff