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Dee2

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  • Birthday April 1

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    Eastern Massachusetts
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    Varied, and then some
  1. Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    Wow, Tink. I didn't realize your previous haiku was based on a real experience. I'm glad you're finally getting back to normal. some days are like that if it can go wrong, it will best to stay in bed
  2. You and I

    Thanks, Tink. I agree that centering can be gimmicky, but I thought it worked here because of the major differences in line length.
  3. Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    coffee floods desktop important papers ruined no lunch break today
  4. Sometimes It Gets Better

    Thanks, Tink. It's already tagged. I wrote it some ago for a Writing.com challenge. And I figured, hey, it's poetry. Why not post it on a poetry site.
  5. church bells

    In the wake of too many mass shootings, my first thought was that this referred to one of those. I absorbed the words without counting syllables, and didn't even notice the haiku form. Unless the writer is meeting a requirement to use a specific form, I think the power of the words should override the importance of the form. And I surprise myself with that attitude, because I enjoy following specific forms. Guess I'm just feeling cantankerous.
  6. Haiku Train - catch it - free tickets

    morning dew wets fur matted stinky mess of hair day begins poorly
  7. You and I

    Thanks, Tony. I grew up in central NY, but my wife and I have lived in Franklin, MA for 24 years (after 15 years bouncing from Boston to Framingham, Watertown, Sharon, and Norfolk). And coffee/brunch sounds good. Dan
  8. A poem in Balassi form (bbaccadda, with syllable counts 6/6/7/6/6/7/6/6/7) We met on a blind date. She was half an hour late, but I was even later. We had not much to say. Her eyes oft went astray. I think she liked the waiter. But I remained polite, and did my best that night not to aggravate her. The evening was too long. The chemistry, all wrong. We both welcomed our parting. But days after we dined, she wouldn’t leave my mind. I felt a passion starting. I broke down and called her, which I think appalled her. Her coldness left me smarting. But I would not take “no." She’d set my heart aglow, with no sane explanation. I begged her for a chance to kindle a romance, through mutual stimulation of body, heart, and soul. 'Twas my romantic goal. But I feared her damnation. So I was shocked when she agreed to go with me to the bistro where we’d met. The date was not the worst; a big step from the first; a delightful tete-a-tete. It’s now been thirty years since getting past our fears, and each year gets better yet.
  9. Snow on epiphany morning

    Interesting pattern, bouncing between depressing (stark and white, empty) and welcoming (fresh coffee, breakfast). I liked the added IKEA stanza and the change from ‘uncurtained’ (simply descriptive) to ‘naked’ (poetic and a bit dangerous). p.s. I’m commenting before I read any other comments, so please forgive me if I repeated what someone else said.
  10. Orlando

    At the time you wrote this, the title suggested a specific event, as Tinker implied. Reading it today, I immediately thought of a certain pseudo-president. As for hate and pity, I have to admit that I have felt both from time to time, and I think it was okay to feel that way as long as I kept it to myself. It's hard not to hate the haters. And, as you said, it's hard to be at peace with everyone.
  11. 5 hours before dawn.

    Whether one has not yet gone to bed or has awakened and cannot get back to sleep, the dead of night provides a time for the mind to toss and turn, to ponder one's successes and failures, to agonize over past mistakes and plan for a future that avoids those speed bumps. Your title alone pulled me into that world.
  12. You and I

    You say what I need to hear, which is one of the reasons I love you. A word, A look, A touch, A feeling that you understand what I’m feeling and you understand what I’m wanting and you know that I understand you in much the same way. The way you look at me when we go out somewhere, to a party, or maybe to dinner, where others will see us and think, “They look happy together.” And we’ll know that they’re right.
  13. I Miss You

    Cute ending, but I think the rest stands alone quite well and captures an emotion that more of us probably can understand.
  14. That Seemed Good

    Creepy. And I agree with Tony about the two-line stanzas. The pattern created a rapid progression from one moment to the next, without a unifying flow that might have allowed the protagonist to assemble a full sense of what was happening.
  15. Cali Fire Storm

    I could almost hear the roar of the inferno, Tink. Nicely done.
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