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  1. haiku journal 2017 jvg #15 warm hugs and kisses from grandkids with pink flowers family comes home
  2. Hi Barry, I love the dog, Caesar literally brings this tale to life. There are so many sad moments in this piece, beginning with the dog lying across the grave and the sound of the hungry child. This is an interesting poem with so many images on which to ponder. ~~ Tink
  3. Haiku Journal 2017 jvg #14 just as school lets out orange tractor drives by smart phones click away Sorry I couldn't resist, talking with my daughter in law while she was picking up my middle school granddaughter, this poor guy jams up school pickup traffic moving his tractor to a job nearby. He couldn't have chosen a worse time, apparently kids were pulling out their phones and clicking away. My own granddaughter was one of them, she sent the photo to me via text since I had already been told about it. At least that is all she did. She said that SnapChat, Instagram and Facebook are being blown up with various photos of "the orange tractor". I know it's hot out there big guy but wear a hat and keep your shirt on while driving slowly by 400 13 and 14 year olds just getting out of school, all with smart phones.
  4. but lights the drama in dark places deemed doomed match ignites in gloom
  5. Judging by the number of hits the articles in the "Sonnet" section receives, the Sonnet and it's many shapes and sizes wins hands down as the most popular verse form in the Reference Forum. Ranging from the purists to the new age anything goes poets and most of us in between, if I make one point about the Sonnet it is: the Sonnet is a lyrical meditation. It should sing to its reader. Meter, rhyme, pivot, even length, all are secondary to the fluid melody that should ring in your reader's ears. So we begin with the basics. This blog was set up to highlight some of the articles in the Reference Forum because many of the guests as well as the silent members come to this site to access the information in that forum. I am hoping that I might hear some of the poems that are being written by silent members and guests alike. You are all welcome to post poems or comments in the blog's reply thread. The Sonnet, Italian sonnetto or Occitan sonet both meaning "little song" or "little sound" is a lyrical meditation. It is a verse form of which some variation can be found in almost all Western cultures and even a few Asian cultures. It often offers a conflict or question, and then works on a solution or answer, all within fourteen lines. (Well sometimes more, sometimes less, but these are exceptions to the rules.) There are two dominant sonnet forms, the Petrarchan or Italian Sonnet and the English or Shakespearean Sonnet. The other sonnet forms seem to be either variations of these or less known predecessors. There are even forms that call themselves sonnets but might not be true sonnets, usually because they try to tell a story or they lack a turn or pivot or an appropriate number of lines. But if it sings . . . . The origin of the sonnet is said to have some uncertainty, though many believe it was born in the south of France or northern Italy created by the troubadours who sang for the courts. The earliest "true" sonnet is credited to Giacomo da Lentini of the Sicilian court of Frederick II (1197-1250). You can read a translation here at Sicilian Sonnet. Sonnet 43 from Songs of the Portugese by Elizabeth Barrett Browning How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace. I love thee to the level of everyday's Most quiet need, by sun and candle-light. I love thee freely, as men strive for Right; I love thee purely, as they turn from Praise. I love thee with the passion put to use In my old griefs, and with my childhood's faith. I love thee with a love I seemed to lose With my lost saints!---I love thee with the breath, Smiles, tears, of all my life!---and, if God choose, I shall but love thee better after death. All sonnets should include these elements: a lyrical meditation. The sonnet should sing. usually composed with themes of love, spirituality, nature, sorrow or celebration. a quatorzain , (a poem in 14 lines). metric. In English, the sonnet is primarily written in iambic pentameter. rhymed. The rhyme scheme is one of the features that identify the individual sonnets. (The Unrhymed and Blank sonnets by name deliberately lack rhyme which technically would be a nonce unrhymed scheme.) See the Sonnet Comparison Chart. written with question-answer or conflict-resolution structure. composed with a turn or change in tone. It is the positioning of this pivot or volta that is also a defining feature of sonnet.
  6. Grey was simply the color of his suit. The situation was serious but not black and actually I was expecting a white coat which is why the color was mentioned at all. I found that this form leaves me wanting to say more. As in the #4 I wanted to fit in "From the garden, the smell of Lavender clings to my fingers but it is the connection to my grandmother that conjures the emotion. Rosemary also clings to my clothes after walking in the garden. I love those scents. ~~Tink
  7. Hi Dave, This publication and how your poem is presented is impressive. How sad and lovely your poem is. I find it odd that in poetry the facts are questioned. I read your poem and it is clear you are sharing an experience. You provide only the color deeming it too exotic to be local. But you don't identify it because you don't know what it is. You are simply guessing, that is made apparent. A poem projects feeling not facts. The poet uses the tools he has available to communicate that emotion, be it what his eyes see or adjusting that image to draw focus to the emotion. We use word choice, word placement, metaphor, repetition, imagery. And yes embellishment of the facts if it will transcend the intellect and move to the heart of the reader. That is my feeling anyway. This is the day of alternative facts, some thing poetry has always employed. ~~Tink
  8. Wow you are really on a roll Badge. Congratulations again. All are good but I especially like the "bent nail" one. (I think it is the 2nd one) It makes me wonder. ~~Tink
  9. Here are a few of my attempts at the American Sentence. #1AS White-haired man in grey tailored suit touches my cold fingers with warm hands. #2AS No moon to dull their sparkle, stars sweep Northern sky. Midnight from my deck. #3AS Crystal water soothes my prickly throat; clear plastic serves up thirst quencher. #4AS Smell of Lavender clings to my fingers, reminds me of my grandma. ~~Judi Van Gorder I've known about this form for some time but finally got around to adding it to the Reference Section. Badger's latest publication made me think of it.
  10. Explore the Craft of Writing Poetry American Verse The American Sentence is a concept of the legendary Beat Poet, Allen Ginsberg. It is simply a poem within 17 syllables in one line. The line should be written in complete sentence(s). It should capture a moment with a “turn”. “poets are people who notice what they notice” Allen Ginsberg Reading Ginsberg’s work you will find that he rarely uses articles such as a, an, the. He believed eliminating unnecessary words gave his work an "immediacy". His trademark style was to, in his words, “condense, condense, condense”. Given that quote you might think he would embrace haiku which in English is 17 syllables broken into lines, most often 5-7-5. But he felt the line breaks reduced the poem to “counting not feeling”. Subsequently, he came up with what he called the American Sentence. "Rainy night on Union Square, full moon. Want more poems? Wait till I’m dead." ~~Allen Ginsberg "Four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella." ~~Allen Ginsberg The elements of the American Sentence are: composed in one line. syllabic, 17 syllables. condensed, written with no unnecessary words or articles. complete sentence or sentences. includes a turn or enlightenment. And my attempt:#1AS White-haired man in grey tailored suit touches my cold fingers with warm hands. ~~Judi Van Gorder (Note: After having written so many haiku, when I initially read about the American Sentence, I thought, this is just a haiku without the line breaks. To my surprise, after researching and reading about the form, I found myself writing an American Sentence from a totally different perspective than the haiku. I wrote my American Sentence from an emotional space rather than the objective observational space I write my haiku.)
  11. Hi Barry, This somber piece captures well a dream sequence, disjointed and in some places bizarre. I was touched by "helping me to rehearse this senseless grief" this line made me feel incredibly sad. I thought your choice of line breaks in the latter half of the poem might have dulled my feelings a bit as I read. It was my 2nd read that connected with the feeling rather than the first. ~~Tink
  12. Hey Geoff, I thought I had responded to this a long time ago but the title stayed bold on my screen so I decided to revisit your poem. My earlier response must have gotten interrupted. Actually, this is a beautiful poem worth the revisit. Tony is right the fluid rhythm, the crystal clear images, the language all make this a poem that touches the heart. A poem that I feel rather than read as if I can breath it in. ~~Tink
  13. Haiku Journal 2017 jvg #13 spikey palm gently sways in morning breeze ocean fog lays low
  14. Haiku Journal 2017 jvg #12 old Husky pants in the heat of this May morning otherwise silence
  15. Thanks Tony, I love, "a diary entry make the writer feel something, a poem makes the reader feel something" That is what we strive for. ~~Judi / Tink