Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 There's a lake beyond the fence, it's not that large and it's not that round but it's a lake, none the less, with water - green - and - brown. A few trees surround the peanut shaped bike and cows lay in the shade... ...ah yes, it's on a farm ...with barns and hills ...and a rail road track - I can see the train rolling by now... .............. . . ......It was quite long. But here I sit once again looking out my window as the train is gone and all is quite and the sun is behind a cloud. MisterPoet Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Aleks, Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Hi MP, It is amazing how you have matured as a writer. This is a very poignant piece, beautifully written. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 wow mp or should i say john my friend! you definitely have matured in your writting style. this was magnificent and beautiful. you painted such a lovey view to rimenise and ponder over, your friend victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Wonderful!! No need to say how talented you are...oops I just said it Also thanks to Alek for sharing this with us and giving us the opportunity to read such beauty! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 aleksandra wrote: ...ah yes, it's on a farm ...with bams* and hills * should this be barns? Frank ...and a rail road track - I can see the train rolling by now... .............. . . ......It was quite long. MisterPoet SO GOOD TO HEAR ANYTHING FROM OUR OLD ASSOCIATE JOHN - I think this is a typo, isn't it Aleks? Of the poem it is simple but earthy tell MP he's missed here and there by me. Frank Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hello my friends. Thank you Tink, Victor, Summayya, Frank for commenting on John's poem. He would be happy when he gonna see all of yours comments. I have some more what are not posted yet, but one by one, I will post them soon. And yes Frank it could be typo and it is in this case, now I will edit that part. Sometimes I can't recognize well what is written , bc of the handwriting, so I am sorry to you all and to John too, that I can make some mistakes while writing the poems. I am printing to him all of these comments and your words, so he will know, and he miss you all of you too. And the fact that we never forgot him will make him happy. Thanks for commenting again by John name. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 A poem of quite astonishing beauty mp inspiring badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I like the imagery of country life and the seemingly slow pace of life there. Nice poem, John. I just wondered why you shifted tense in describing the train. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Thanks badge and Joel in a John's name. He will read your comments and he can answer Joel. Thank you for reading my friends Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I grew up in a town that had a "farm" just like this, Mr. P -- railroad track, cows, and many windows. Enjoyed the effect here: aleksandra wrote: I can see the train rolling by now... .............. . . ......It was quite long. I like all your latest verse very much. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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