Benjamin Posted August 6, 2012 Share Posted August 6, 2012 Countless sleepless nights and mornings after, when my futile complaints questioned all reason. What it's like to be young-- living for the moment. Sex. The reek of cannabis-- constant foul language. Tequila slammers and c.d.s-- All night raves and toxic rap “I wanna kill ev'ry body in da world!” A bubble of zombie flesh burst with one loud bang as the bailiffs enter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted August 6, 2012 Share Posted August 6, 2012 Hi, I was right with this until "I wanna kill ...." at that point the poem takes on another life and am sitting in court. This is an odd but intersting piece. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted August 7, 2012 Author Share Posted August 7, 2012 Hi Tink. Thanks for looking in. Trials and tribulations of modern living. The immorality of the music industry never seems to astound me. I heard those robotic lyrics coming from a 13yr. old's cell phone. B Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted August 7, 2012 Share Posted August 7, 2012 wonderfully succinct Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted August 7, 2012 Share Posted August 7, 2012 What a piteous group of lemmings we can be! Even non-conformists conform to their (derived) notion of non-conformity. I think it was Cocteau or Gide (one of those French buggers) who said, in paraphrase: "True originals are people who desparately want to be normal but don't know how." Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted August 8, 2012 Author Share Posted August 8, 2012 Thanks Eclipse and Bren. I remember my own youth and how we all conspired so hard to be 'different' that we all ended up looking just the same. Sigh! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 9, 2012 Share Posted August 9, 2012 Well, well done. Having spent time recently with 20 somethings- this rings all kinds of bells. Nice! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted August 9, 2012 Share Posted August 9, 2012 Long ago times when our worst sin was a bottle of beer, sneaked with pride with our buds. We survived. Now, countless youth fill the streets and neighborhoods throughout the night, pumped up on something-something invented every day. No purpose, no sense of personal responsibility for anything, even the beating to death with a baseball bat of an old man who could not defend himself against a chlld. No parental control from early age, and even no caring--certainly no love--as the so-called adults go about their indendent lives, then spend fortunes defending the acts of the monsters they created. Yes, this is not about the quality of your poem, but the rant of an old man who has lost all sympathy for those who bring woe upon themselves, aware or not. How do we continue to ignore the violence of today? Most who destroy all around them were coddled all their few years. Thanks for getting me in a real snit, Geoff! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted August 10, 2012 Author Share Posted August 10, 2012 As a child born of the generation who came together to fight a common enemy. I shudder at the fragmented antithesis that now prevails. This snapshot can be taken from different aspects; perhaps the bailiffs indicate a certain justice or relief for some-- and the birth of a new reality for others. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 10, 2012 Share Posted August 10, 2012 The day of reckoning for an ideology that has backfired, partly an unintended consequence, partly by design. Sobering. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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