Benjamin Posted June 11, 2013 Share Posted June 11, 2013 With scant cognition of the corpse's stench: Black heads together, they begin to mutter Like magistrates that sit upon the Bench. Whilst those beneath them mitigate and stutter Over a fortuitously come by supper. Who'll get the soft parts, who will get the rind. And judgement passed: incongruously flutter About their bloody feast; paying no mind To what the creature was, only what's left behind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 11, 2013 Share Posted June 11, 2013 Appropriately morbid! now is it a naturalistic piece or more of gothic bent? Regardless, it is to my liking. Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 12, 2013 Author Share Posted June 12, 2013 It stems from a recent comment I made re: the traditional Scottish poem/song "Twa Corbies". Where two crows discuss how to dismember the body of a fallen knight. The interpretation here however, is up to the discretion of the reader. Purely as an exercise I've tried to observe some of the rules of Spenserian Stanza Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 This is great! I love anything about ominous birds, but my lord, G, you are more ambitious than I. Excellent 'exercise' you have accomplished with this one. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 There seem to be a good many crows and their kin in poetry. Just as well, as they are apt subjects and smart enough to enjoy their fame, I suspect. This was fun! Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 Made me think of black-robed priests around a heretic after their torturer finished his job. Just one of many images that could aptly apply. Great mood piece. And judgement passed: incongruously flutter About their bloody feast; paying no mind To what the creature was, only what's left behind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 13, 2013 Author Share Posted June 13, 2013 Old folklore symbolized most natural things ie: raven on the roof was a bad omen.. other birds, creatures, trees etc. are all represented in the ageless imaginings of mankind. The nature of crows however, seems to make them stand out as a reflective source for the less savoury aspects of humanity. On a somewhat different note: I recall as a child the crows singing in Walt Disney's "Dumbo" "I've done seen about anything.. when I see an elephant fly!" G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 Like magistrates that sit upon the Bench. Reminds me of the Pope line: Wretches hang, that jurymen may dine. Loved this poem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted June 16, 2013 Share Posted June 16, 2013 Geoff, Poe meets Ogden (g)Nash with a dash of Swift in this dark caped swirl of rhyme! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 16, 2013 Author Share Posted June 16, 2013 Thanks dcmarti and Dave. A little self-indulgence.. perhaps more Vincent Price than Poe :-) but even the most innocuous of themes may hold dark connotations from fairy tales upward. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dansalinger Posted June 19, 2013 Share Posted June 19, 2013 super Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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