dcmarti1 Posted August 25, 2013 Share Posted August 25, 2013 I just tried to have quick images and memories, even if they are just sentence fragments. WRT the statement about Camus, ONE sentence from The Myth of Sisyphus got me out of a 3 year depression/funk: "It is essential to die unreconciled and not of your own free will." This was written in 2013. I put it in Workshop not so much to re-work it, but just due to the fact I did not count syllables, attempt rhyme, try to force a structure, etc. About as "stream of consciousness" as my rigid personality will allow. :) It's 1994 and I iron 5 shirts on Sunday nights,and I love Mondays,and my workstation does not have a mouse,and we still use carbon-copy forms,and there is no such thing as Casual Friday,and I do not own a car,and Saturdays seem longer,and the water at Dupont Circle fountain is colder & cleaner,and I pick up guys at Dupont Circle,and I pick up guys at Mr. P's,and I pick up guys at The Frat House,and I have stopped picking up guys at The Fireplace,and I have friends of tricks who drop by unannounced,and the Crew Club is gritty,and the Men's Party is frightening,and I have sex in the woods at P Street Beach,and sex and poetry are the movers of the universe,and the world around my head seems bigger,and the space between the trees seems wider,and the impatiens seems a deeper red,and I have never heard of Leonardo Boff,and I have forgotten about Oscar Romero,and I have just read Albert Camus, and I do not cry like I do now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted August 25, 2013 Share Posted August 25, 2013 Well, at least you read Camus. ;) Life is good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted August 29, 2013 Share Posted August 29, 2013 very Interesting format, well written. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted August 29, 2013 Author Share Posted August 29, 2013 very Interesting format, well written. victor Thank you for reading and commenting. I believe the format is called a "list" poem. That is, according to poet and author Nikki Moustaki in her book The Complete Idiot's Guide to Writing Poetry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 24, 2013 Share Posted October 24, 2013 I think this belongs in the main poetry showcase, so I'm moving it. There's only one thing I would change: the last line. I would probably drop "like I do now" so that the line reads simply and I do not cry I realize you posted this back in August. Sorry I'm just getting to it now. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 25, 2013 Share Posted October 25, 2013 Another absolutely lovely piece. Stunning. The extraordinary of the ordinary and the passage of time. Love it. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted October 26, 2013 Share Posted October 26, 2013 I haven't done much of this streaming - I think I should do more. It has a healthy catharsis element for a writer, I think. And, they are good to look back on, at least from what I have done because, curiously, they seem to pin time in certain way that a focused poem may not. Go ahead, do some more. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 26, 2013 Author Share Posted October 26, 2013 I think this belongs in the main poetry showcase, so I'm moving it. There's only one thing I would change: the last line. I would probably drop "like I do now" so that the line reads simply and I do not cry I realize you posted this back in August. Sorry I'm just getting to it now. Tony I am pretty much honoured that an Admin likes it that much to move it. Thank you! I will THINK about the suggestion of line shortening.....promise. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 26, 2013 Author Share Posted October 26, 2013 Another absolutely lovely piece. Stunning. The extraordinary of the ordinary and the passage of time. Love it. Juris I was just happy I "let loose" for a change. I am now HAPPIER that folks can relate to it. Thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 26, 2013 Author Share Posted October 26, 2013 Go ahead, do some more. Oh, lemme see what I can dredge up, haha. Thanks for the encouragement..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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