tonyv Posted April 8, 2016 L14: That day she chose to ride beyond the wall to the dark edge of the vast wilderness, by nightfall wolves had gathered at her call beneath a vault adorned in evening dress. A great gray owl swoops low over the steppes as a black he-goat takes the lead in dance. Into blue flames the moon-racked pack all leapt in pan flute augury, now lithe, now stanced. I turn to ask my Gran for another page, but hirsute hands now grasp the manuscript. My eyes averted, too afraid to engage a mind that has slipped -- nor is my soul equipped to face the fate mere words, in vain, encrypt from seed to womb till ash with life-force stripped. Soliciting a title ... Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tonyv Posted April 9, 2016 Playing around with the tense(s): That day she chose to ride beyond the wall to the dark edge of the vast wilderness, by nightfall wolves had gathered at her call beneath a vault adorned in evening dress. A great gray owl swooped low over the steppes as a black he-goat took the lead in dance. Into blue flames the moon-racked pack all leapt in pan flute augury, now lithe, now stanced. I turn to ask my Gran for another page, but hirsute hands now grasp the manuscript. My eyes averted, too afraid to engage a mind that has slipped -- my soul is ill-equipped to face a fate mere words, in vain, encrypt from seed to womb till ash with life-force stripped. How do all y'all feel about using the past tense for the first two quatrains with a shift to the present tense to mark a turn at the third quatrain and couplet? Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
badger11 Posted April 9, 2016 Playing around with the tense(s): That day she chose to ride beyond the wall to the dark edge of the vast wilderness, by nightfall wolves had gathered at her call beneath a vault adorned in evening dress. A great gray owl swooped low over the steppes as a black he-goat took the lead in dance. Into blue flames the moon-racked pack all leapt in pan flute augury, now lithe, now stanced. I turn to ask my Gran for another page, but hirsute hands now grasp the manuscript. My eyes averted, too afraid to engage a mind that has slipped -- my soul is ill-equipped to face a fate mere words, in vain, encrypt from seed to womb till ash with life-force stripped. How do all y'all feel about using the past tense for the first two quatrains with a shift to the present tense to mark a turn at the third quatrain and couplet? sounds good to me Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tinker Posted April 10, 2016 Me too Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
badger11 Posted April 10, 2016 A poll for title suggestions? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
badger11 Posted April 11, 2016 A suggestion from each contributor for a title and then a vote? My suggestion: Samhain Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
badger11 Posted April 16, 2016 No further offers of a title? Either way great to have a PMO sonnet! best badge Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tonyv Posted April 18, 2016 Badge, I'm liking "Samhain." It certainly fits the motif. I haven't had a chance to give it much thought, but I will this week. In addition to the obvious eerie elements, I also see this poem touching upon matters of mental illness, losing one's mind de to aging, dementia, etc. Also, thank you very much for this sonnet prompt. I've enjoyed the collaboration a lot. When we have a title and completed poem we'll cross-post it in the Member Poetry and Collaborative Works forums. Tony :) Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tinker Posted April 24, 2016 My internet access has been down for the last week. I'd love to get cable up here, it comes within a mile of my home but it is not financially conducive to go any further up the mountain so satellite internet is better than dial up. Samhain sounds good but I haven't a clue what it means and right now I'm too tired to google it. With no internet I had to entertain myself somehow so I have been painting my dining room and den for the past 2 days and Tuesday I painted my front door red. Love it. Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
badger11 Posted May 2, 2016 Life without the internet...sounds real Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites