JoelJosol Posted July 13, 2016 Share Posted July 13, 2016 Maybe Sylvia was serious when she meant of her bering generous with mother-love with her children-poems. I am not a mother but have witnessed the parent-pain for the still-born ones, who appeared to have normal limbs like lines that flow from one to the next, as if alive but no amount of inspiration or aspiration will restore the dead words, the still images in the mind. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 30, 2016 Share Posted July 30, 2016 Hi Joel, Reading this was like a punch in the stomach. The hyphenated words were very effective. The opening is almost conversational then you pare the words down to the last couplet painting a silent portrait. I am a mother who lost a child before birth and the vacuum it left has been with me for 50 years. Time shades the memory but effective words can bring back yesterday. Good writing. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted July 31, 2016 Author Share Posted July 31, 2016 Thanks for reading Tink. I also lost a child at the moment of birth. So, when I read the poem of Sylvia Plath's Stillborn, I was prod to react to it with this poem. I tried not to cross-over to sentimentality but to stay matter of factly. I would have written "stilled images in the mind" but I am not sure of its correctness. I felt it would have echoed nicely with "dead words". Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 7, 2016 Share Posted August 7, 2016 A courageous and difficult piece, Joel. Effectively delivered. I keep coming back to this treatment of one of the tragedies of the race. Thank You (I think), - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted August 16, 2016 Share Posted August 16, 2016 I cannot add anything to Tinker and Dave. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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