JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 [Revision] You are here. There is no site map as guide to find the nearest exit. A scan for the familiar (I am no liar) will not yield the path. Stay and check each word instead. Get drenched in the meaninglessness. Don't look at your watch wondering when will I point the way out. How much time do you have? I only have one period left. [Original] You are here. There is no site map as guide to find the nearest exit. A scan for the familiar (I am no liar), will not yield the path. Stay and dip your eyes on words instead. Get drenched in the meaninglessness. You look at your watch wondering when will I point the way out. How much time do you have? I only have one more period. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 JoelJosol. A marvelous existential romp- From Sartre to Derrida, you got it all! Well done... Much enjoyed! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 You're too generous, DrC! Thanks anyways :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello JoelJosol, There's a sense of collision of emotions and expectations perhaps an estrangement between two people : You are here. There is no site map as guide to find the nearest exit. A scan for the familiar (I am no liar), will not yield the path. There's a hint of one being trapped, perhaps at the mercy of the other who has betrayed. The details: will not yield the path, meaninglessness, you look at your watch, How much time do you have? I only have one more period all build up to anger, even accusation. One senses disappointment, rage and pain. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 GL, I am glad you got that sense. The original title of this piece was supposed to be a metaphor of a worldview of life, "Labyrinth". But, it would give away the poem. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 You are here. There is no site map as guide to find the nearest exit. A scan for the familiar (I am no liar), will not yield the path. Stay and dip your eyes on words instead. Get drenched in the meaninglessness. You look at your watch wondering when will I point the way out. How much time do you have? I only have one more period Wonderful poem with a good aesthetics. The richness of a good expressions makes this poem compact and strong. Very well written Joel. Glad to read this. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 I like it, Joel. "You are here" can be good or bad, and though the general sense seems to be one of being lost -- A scan for the familiar (I am no liar), will not yield the path -- the title implies that there is a way out. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 Thank you, too, Alek and Tony. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 yes, this poem is charged with a steaming set of emotions which simmer just below the surface. very well articulated and emotionally insightful. enjoyed the sense of drama and passion too... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted November 19, 2012 Author Share Posted November 19, 2012 Made some revision. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted November 19, 2012 Share Posted November 19, 2012 such rich and excellent work Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted November 20, 2012 Share Posted November 20, 2012 never read this one before joel. very interesting write. thank you. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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