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summayya

THANK YOU

 

As the fading colors of day

wet the evening,

I whisper your name-

 

Can the sunset ever be thanked?

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tonyv

There's a freshness present in the lovely first two lines of this compact lyric. No matter if the day is long and hot, the evening brings with it a cool, thirst-quenching wetness.

 

The "whisper" shows a longing. It indicates a separation from the other, a secret, or both.

 

The last line, with its sunset metaphor, ties in perfectly with the nightfall imagery in the beginning. The question is, of course, rhetorical. The sunset can't help but be there.

 

Tony


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goldenlangur

Hello summayyah,

 

 

You convey so well how at dusk feelings and thoughts put aside in the bustle of the day return with intensity. Here the colours of the twilight unleash in the poet a longing and the setting sun is a silent witness. There's a lovely quietness of moment and tone in this poem. Love the detail:

 

wet the evening

 

 

This poem certainly does not seem 'rusty'. Great to read your work again icon_biggrin.png

 

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur


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pawn shop

I always thought...that a prenuptial agreement before one gets married......

is for the couple to watch together, somewhere special, sunsets......3 times a week !!

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Tinker

Yeah, I am so happy to see you here summaya, I have missed you! The joy of your return is accented by this lovely poem. I love the romance.

 

~~Tink


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Aleksandra

How refreshing Summayya to read your work after some time. WC back our dear friend.

The poem is lovely, and there are a lot of metaphors. I like the expression: " wet the evening, " and I love the question at the end.

 

Grateful poem - I like it.

Thank you for sharing and I wish I read more from you

 

Aleksandra


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dr_con

Masters of short forms, you and Golden...

 

I am humbled by the sparse brevity, and yet a profound communication.

 

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Frank E Gibbard

Long time since I saw something from you Summayya, good to have you back. Can relate to the personalisation of addressing the elements. Frank

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douglas

what an elegant piece of poetry! it is full of romance and dreaminess. i was transported for far longer than it took to read this poem.

 

douglas


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Lake

Glad to see you back with such a thankful poem. Like others, I like " wet the evening " , too.

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JoelJosol

Nice poem, summaya. Very picturesque. Is the question part of the poem or a comment?


"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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summayya

Thanks for the read, the comment everyone. I am humbled by all of 'em!

 

Thank you all.

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badger11

A delightful poem, so evocative.

 

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Bloodyday

i think the name you are whispering should be so proud!

 

 

but for the beauty of sunset, i must thank to Allah of letting me watch such a beauty once again!

 

great work, dude!

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