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Growing up with Nan
I spent my idle times
spying through lace curtains.
Vagueness became a friend.
My Impressionist bride.

Older now, inherited
the flat, and there are blinds
giving a peek on outside,
a sort of Cubist slant -
art makes choices, and so do I.

 

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Growing up with Nan
I spent my idle times
spying through lace curtains.
Vagueness became a friend.
My Impressionist bride.

Older now, inherited
the flat, and there are blinds
giving a peek on outside.
A sort of Cubist slant.
Art moves on, and so do brides.

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Tinker

Hi Badge,  For some reason this just feels easy.  Easy as in comfortable, a sort of reflection on an accepted life.  A life that has known love and loss and sees the beauty of it all.  I really like it.  

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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tonyv

 Well, I did see the first version of this, and there have been some minor changes which yielded major improvements in L8 & L9. 

Having spent some time in the Boston area, I had heard the expression "Lace Curtain Irish" used, and being unfamiliar with it at the time, was prompted to look it up. I think I detect a juxtapositioning of that image in S1 and the "cubist slant" represented by the blinds in S2. It's not an all-out shift but a subtle signifier that the speaker has moved on to his own domesticity, his own environs.

I agree with Judi that this an "easy" read, and I attribute that to the well crafted composition. I do wonder who the bride may be.

Tony


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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badger11

Thanks Tink and Tony. I've edited the last line.

all the best

Phil

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