tonyv Posted October 15, 2019 Share Posted October 15, 2019 Like jets on westward flight paths, chase the day; recall, when Greenland is in darkness, soon it will be pitch here, too; forget the moon, give in, and listen to the next track play: When stars shine bright they make me lonely I'll never have a still life dream My Starry Night, dissolving slowly, Disintegrates into The Scream Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted October 16, 2019 Share Posted October 16, 2019 Hi Tony, Like the 'distance', the standing outside oneself, present in the title. The rational 'advice' to the emotional 'driver'. And what is that advice? A pursuit of light - like the dynamic of that opening simile. And then the grounding of the inevitable - dark will follow light. The advice continues...resignation rather than imagination, the light of the 'moon', and distraction in sleepless hours. Ironically the lyric only offers its own chilling embrace. best Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 16, 2019 Author Share Posted October 16, 2019 On 10/16/2019 at 3:56 AM, badger11 said: Hi Tony, Like the 'distance', the standing outside oneself, present in the title. The rational 'advice' to the emotional 'driver'. And what is that advice? A pursuit of light - like the dynamic of that opening simile. And then the grounding of the inevitable - dark will follow light. The advice continues...resignation rather than imagination, the light of the 'moon', and distraction in sleepless hours. Ironically the lyric only offers its own chilling embrace. best Phil Thanks, Phil. I like your breakdown/analysis of this poem. That's how it comes across for me, too. I was surprised and pleased, myself, when I saw how this one had progressed. The first line misleads by giving the poem a positive vibe which quickly plummets in the second and third lines. Ultimately, the song lyrics are of no help; the poem comes full circle to no escaping from the human condition, and the speaker-advisor/listener is not alone in how he feels (as is evident from the song lyrics). With appreciation, Tony Notes: Starry Night The Scream Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted October 17, 2019 Share Posted October 17, 2019 Tony, This poem is a soulful, lonely song that vibrates in my chest as I read it. You capture a real life moment that so many of us have felt and couldn't articulate. I love that you are sharing more of your own work. This is a moving piece that needs no explaination, I just felt it. Great writing. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 17, 2019 Author Share Posted October 17, 2019 8 hours ago, Tinker said: Tony, This poem is a soulful, lonely song that vibrates in my chest as I read it. You capture a real life moment that so many of us have felt and couldn't articulate. I love that you are sharing more of your own work. This is a moving piece that needs no explaination, I just felt it. Great writing. ~~Judi Thank you, Judi. I'd like to write some more poems like this one. I'll try. I'm pleased you like it. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 19, 2019 Share Posted October 19, 2019 Emotional and lyrical 180 degree turn. Surprise! Nicely crafted. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 19, 2019 Author Share Posted October 19, 2019 6 hours ago, dcmarti1 said: Emotional and lyrical 180 degree turn. Surprise! Nicely crafted. Thank you, Marti! I always appreciate your remarks! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A. Baez Posted November 28, 2019 Share Posted November 28, 2019 This is tight and powerful, lyrical yet modern. Do the lyrics you quoted belong to a real song? They're quite a scream! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted November 29, 2019 Author Share Posted November 29, 2019 On 11/28/2019 at 12:32 AM, A. Baez said: This is tight and powerful, lyrical yet modern. Do the lyrics you quoted belong to a real song? They're quite a scream! Thank you, A. Baez. They are not from any real song -- at least that I'm aware. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A. Baez Posted November 29, 2019 Share Posted November 29, 2019 I see! So you're a songwriter, too! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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